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Review #1, by HPPC Staff [1]

7th May 2012:
Hello VioletBlade! I'm here on behalf of the HPPC Staff to say thank you so much for entering our Challenge! This was such a fun entry and I truly enjoyed it!

First of all, I just have to say that this is really such a creative idea! Honestly, when I look at the list of quotes you could choose from, this is one of the ones I saw and thought to myself 'I don't think I could ever come up with a plot to fit that!' And yet you've used it in such a clever, and hilarious, way. So basically, as far as the Challenge goes, I think you did a really great job - and that's not even mentioning the fact that this was actually combined with a second challenge! Congratulations on filling both requirements with one story - I don't think I could do it. Oh, and what I also really enjoyed about this fic was how well it played into the prize of being turned into a full-sound-effects Podcast! Every time I've read through the story I've thought 'This would be great as a Podcast!' Anyway, moving on:

I think you do a really nice job at working in a little background information into the story. Because it's a one-shot and the plot line is based pretty solely around the potion making and its effects, you easily could have left out small details like how Louis loves to be out on his broom and how Rose treats Scorpius and the way he responds to her cold shoulder. It's these details that give the story more than one dimension, which is really great to see!

So I'm not a huge next gen reader, but I thought it was an interesting choice to use Louis rather than, say, Albus, whom we so often see as the Slytherin who befriends a Malfoy. This comes right back to your ability to think creatively. :-)

I love, love, love the effects the potion has. I'm making the assumption that the creating a potion backwards was given to you by the other Challenge this was written for, but either way, the actual effect that the combined challenges ended up giving us was just so funny. I can just imagine all of these major cities experiencing totally bizarre weather and just being completely baffled as to what in the world is going on! hahaha Actual cats and dogs raining? Classic. :-p All of the effects were really funny, and I have to say that you really made the quote work for you even more when you mentioned Fleur looking out of the window to see blue and purple goo coming down - I giggled with the boys and Headmaster Longbottom (LOVE that he becomes headmaster, btw :-p)!

Here are just a few small things:

"I almost said it to her out loud, but Professor Bungler and I already have had our differences and I've already got six Howlers this year already from my mum in response to complaints from my Potions teacher." - You use the word 'already' three times in this sentence and it's a little repetitive, and the second and third one don't work together, either.

"Now that I compared my results to theirs to mine..." - No 'to mine'.

"...the anchor for the London Weather reported, a look of confusion written throughout his face." - I think the look of confusion could be written 'on' his face, but 'throughout' doesn't really work, I don't think.

"Headmaster Longbottom was muttering something about how he'd never had anything as bad as this before, not even in the six years James has been around and threw green powder in the fireplace to Floo our parents." - This sentence is a little confusing and unclear. Because there's no comma separating the thoughts about James with the floo powder, it sounds like James is the one tossing the green powder, not Neville. It needs a bit of rewrite too, though - a comma alone won't completely solve the sentence.

There were a few other places throughout the story that I felt needed a comma, but overall this piece was nothing but enjoyable! You did a great job and, once again, thank you so much for entering our Challenge! :-)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

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Review #2, by Live Life Large [1]

30th April 2012:
Hi there! LiveLarge here to review your challenge entry:D
I thought you did really well with this! My favorite lines were "...which only brought to mind Teddy Lupin running around frantically trying to fix the problems we’d started..." and "Much too complicated, all in all, if you asked me. But, again, nobody ever asks me." The 1st quote created such a hilarious mental image I just had to laugh, and the sarcasm in the 2nd was just lovely, with a bit of truth stirred in and mixed 5 times clockwise, seeing as we're doing this backwards. I also liked that bit; I'd never really thought about the complications of making a potion backwards.

There was a mistake I noticed, not that it was anything very important. "...I wondered whether there’s would actually turn out to be cooler than mine." I think you probably meant theirs in that sentence(:

Nice job, VioletBlade! Thanks for entering my challenge; I enjoyed reading this(: Until next time, remember to...
Live Life Large(;

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thank you so much for the review, it definitely brightened up my day! I am dreadfully sorry at how long it's taken me to respond to the review however! There's no excuse for that! D:

I'm glad you liked the premise of the story! The original version was from Albus' point of view in which he and Scorpius were enemies and he was dared to brew an Amortentia potion backwards, however, as you can see, that drastically changed! (Something you should be glad for as that other one definitely had many plot holes that were screaming at me just from the description xD)

NO NOT A MISTAKEN Their, They're, There's! Gah, I must fix this. Thank you for bringing that to my attention! I must have been half-asleep to not have noticed that xD

Anyway, thank you again for the wonderful review! I loved writing this for your challenge! :D

~VioletBlade


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Review #3, by Cavell [1]

30th April 2012:
Ahahaha. Normally I see Albus best friends with Scorpius, but I loved Louis with him too! Raining blue and purple goo! Oh, how I would love to be in France at that very moment! I also really enjoyed the three weather reports in the middle, and all the bizarre things falling from the sky, so well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for a lovely review! I'm really glad you enjoyed this story, just been a plunny nagging at me for a really long time although originally it started out very differently ;) Thanks again!

~VioletBlade


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Review #4, by thesinandthesinner [1]

17th April 2012:
This was hilarious. I thought it was quite original with the odd friendship and I have to admit I don't usually read post generation fics but this one caught my eye. The little details you threw in, like the Potions professor's name and her character really added subtle depth to this fic and I quite liked the voice of Louis. Great job!

Author's Response: Haha, I'm really glad you enjoyed it! I was going to write from Rose's POV, but then I thought about it a little more and thought, well, I COULD be cliche and write that or I could pluck a character out of the air! I just felt like maybe out of all the Weasley's, that family wouldn't be as concerned with image or family history... :)

Thanks for stopping by and reviewing! Means so much!

~VioletBlade


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Review #5, by tihii [1]

12th April 2012:
Hihi! I loved it. Hilarious, really. Short, but to the point. Nice!

Author's Response: Hi! I'm really glad you enjoyed it! ^_^ Thanks for stopping by and reviewing!

~VioletBlade


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