I like the way you write. You make the impossible sound so appealing. It's great how you characterize Snape. As a sort of Yin - Yang figure. Like that old native american proverb goes " There are two wolves that reside in every mans heart. One is good the other evil and the one that you feed the most wins". I like it, that you haven't portrayed lily as the good side of Snape, but more like the 'fuel' for his good side. Basically she keeps the dark wolf in check. Love it. Keep em coming.

Author's Response: Aww! Why thank you! :) I really try to go for the opposite of what most think about characters, but that's mainly because I don't believe that most characters are the way others think they are. :) I've always thought there was a good side to Snape, and she is the first sign of good he had introduced in his life. I'm really glad you like the story, and that's a really nice quote. I've never heard it before. :) Thank you for reviewing!

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Alright, I have just enough time right now to review all of the stories that were put in the comments so I don't have enough time to read and review every single chapter of this story just yet but I will if I remember to come back to this. I was planning on reading and reviewing every story of yours but because of time . . . anyway, moving on.

I started to feel so bad for Severus when he was crying and as much as I still dislike the man, I started to pity him and feel sorry for what he'd gone through.

And then he blamed James for getting him and Lily killed because they trusted Sirius and that pity mostly went away. My immediate thought was "and Severus is back people." He just really never learned to let go of all of the hate, did he. James outgrew his bully years and became a nice person but Severus just really can't let go of anything.

I felt the need to defend Sirius whenever he was mentioned and smack talked about even if it did make sense in the context. NO ONE CAN INSULT SIRIUS!

There was this one part where I just started laughing even though it wasn't funny. Severus said how he would protect Harry no matter what and that he'd look out for him and I started laughing because while he did look after Harry, he did it in such a bad way.

"I will protect your son by treating him like the gum stuck to the bottom of my shoes."

Oh Severus, I don't think he ever really got the hang of expressing his feelings towards people in a way that showed it was caring.

Anyway, great job on this!

Author's Response: "I will protect your son by treating him like the gum stuck to the bottom of my shoes."

Oh my goodness that had me laughing! xD

"And maybe, if he's lucky, I won't scrape it off and dump it." lol

Anyway, I take it you're a Sirius lover then? ;) Well, it's good to know I got you to pity Snape even for a split second. It shows that he can have his weak moments you know? ;)

Thank you so so much for stopping by to review! I was pleasantly surprised you chose a WIP. :) I hope you some day get a chance to read the story just to enjoy it as a whole. :) Thank you for the lovely review! Have fun with everything else!

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very good. keep it up

Author's Response: Thank you for leaving a review! :)

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Bloody loved it. out of all the HP fan fiction, by far the best. keep it up.

Author's Response: Oh wow! This really surprised me and made my whole day! (Hard to do since I watched Glee today, too ;)) Thank you so much for all of the kind words and I'll definitely be sure to do just that! :) Again, thank you! Your review has me smiling from ear to ear! :D

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Why is Snape bad at potions? :/
Is there a plot development there?
Is he just being lazy? :(
i wish i could rate 8.6

Author's Response: I never said he was bad at potions, he just works harder at the class. :) It gives an excuse as to why he would make so many notes and such. Potions was never one of Snape's favorite subjects anyway, but it is simple enough to follow through with and get the instructions done. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing.

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Once again another wonderful chapter. And I think you have the characters down to a T.
I loved the bit about the Dragon Scale cauldron, how ever did youi come up with that idea?
Another full marks and moving on.

Author's Response: I don't remember how I came up with them actually. I remember I was desperately needing something that Severus would refuse to get because James suggested it, and I think that was the first thing that came to mind. I'm really glad you like the characters. This new chapter I'm writing I'm hoping it still stays true to them since I haven't written anything for this story in a while. Thanks for the read and review!

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Wow, this chapter was so good. I have never read a better indepth version of Sevs feelings towards Lily.
Wonderful start and 10/10. Must move on.

Author's Response: magicmuggle, your reviews always make my day! I log on to see a couple new reviews and they're always from you! :D I'm glad you like this story. I'm waiting for two things to go through validation and this is the next thing in line to get a chapter update! :) Thank you so much for coming over to read and review!

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I almost cried reading this.

Author's Response: I am severely hoping you mean this in the good way, of course! :) Thank you for reading and reviewing!

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I just read your blog and hurried over- I've always found Severus Snape to be a very intriguing character and this interest naturally transfers over to stories about him.

Oooh- I found this a very interesting first chapter! In particular, I liked your prologue. I found it very touching and very true- and a very good place to begin. I especially enjoyed the sentence: "What better place to start than the end?" - it was the perfect transition into the first chapter. I just have one question: Did Harry write the letter?

As well, I think that you did a good job with the scene at the graveyard. At first I thought that he was going to see Lily alive and when I read your description about the destruction of Godric's Hollow I was prepared for a very emotional read (which you still delivered). I was almost relieved when I saw that Lily was dead for this meant that Severus had already had some time to absorb the information of Lily's death.

As I said before, I think that you did a good job with the interaction between Severus and Lily's grave. It makes sense that he would be full of regret and wishing that he had acted differently in the past, and you certainly brought his emotional attachment to Lily to the forefront in a manner that wasn't overwhelming.

I just have a few small corrections that can be very easily fixed: to begin, with "hard-ache" I believe you meant "heart-ache" and with "bravery as he did" I would add "showed as much" before "bravery" because I'm not sure that you can "go through" bravery like you can with heart-ache (this could, of course, just be personal opinion). Finally, with "their grave sight" I believe it should be "site".

As well, the sentence "Now to move on to his story" sounded a little harsh compared to the almost poetic flow you'd established with the rest of the letter- is there a better way to transition? It's just a minor thing but it stood out for me from the rest of the letter.

All in all I really enjoyed this first chapter and I think that you're off to a great start! It'll be interesting to see where you take this story- will you now go back to the beginning of his life or tell his story backwards?

Author's Response: Thank you for such a wonderful review! I'll be sure to look at those corrections definitely! I'm really glad you liked the letter because I think that is absolutely my favorite part I have written. As to if Harry wrote it, I can't say. That is one of the mysteries that is left in the story. :) You are right in saying that this will go back to the beginning next chapter. The End: Part Two will bill the ending chapter for the entire story, but hopefully that is nowhere in the near future because there is quite a bit to tell in his story.

Again, thank you so much for the review! I will definitely do the same thing for you! :D

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