This is really good! You should make this into a story! (If you want to) about what would happen if she saw him again and what if she was part of the order so they call her back and she sees him etc. That would be an great story but yeah..you don't have to..just seems like a good plot or whatever. Anyways, great oneshot! I felt what she felt, it was so...efhjksksj;; I dont know how to explain but I liked it. 10/10 Report Review
The way you wrote the idea of her love never ending but the trust weakening was very powerful. Love is a strange emotion, one that i don't think ever ends, because when you love someone, you never really let them go. You still have the good memories, even if there are bad too. The way that you wrote her emotions was wonderful, the way that she cannot grasp that he would have done that (because we know that he actually didn't!) because of the happiness he brought her was amazing. What really struck me from your story is that she never took off the ring, and I loved that you wrote 'I know it's not healthy, But I can't" because I think that that's a very powerful line, and really it tells the whole story that she just can't seem to let him go. This was a very inspiring piece of writing! Never stop!
RavenclawWayToBeAuthor's Response: aww :') i'm glad that you liked it so much. I know, I love Sirius so much I just put myself in the place of his fiancee (he MUST have had one!) and i came up with that. I'm really glad, thank you! xxx Report Review
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection