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Review #1, by AriesGirl40 University Life

14th May 2012:
I have two things to say about chapter one. That was beyond interesting, I loved it! The plot is a wonderful Idea!
Number two, sounds like criticism, but it really isn't, with your next chapter you should make it so each speaker begins a new sentance. It's just how it's done. I'm not making it up. I loved this chapter :)
Demo:
"Ron, I hate you with every fiber of my being!" Hermione said, her body shaking in fury.

"Love, you don't truly mean that." Ron replied sounding desperate.

"Oh yes I do." Hermione countered, turned, and was gone.

I have popped you in my favorites. I look forward to reading your next chapter 10/10!

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