I have to say, I love that you are re-writing the story. I liked the one before (not too much from the beginning, but as the story progressed it got much better). I have done the same with my stories.
I would love to help you with any writer's blocks, as I've done this job before. I am having difficulty with the forums, so just e-mail me at my username (all lowercase) at gmail. I look forward to hearing from you. And I love this chapter. Report Review
This chapter was great, so I decided to read the original. That was a mistake. What started out as a fun fluffy piece turned into over angst crap. I had to stop reading it was getting so bad. If your rewrite is going to follow the same plot; Harry breaking up with Ginny, Ginny hating Harry, you will not have me as a reader.Author's Response: unfortunately, i agree completely with your opinion. i actually couldnt stand the original so much that i had to rewrite it all from the ground up. the rewrite will follow the same plot, though, except ive made everything more believeable. of course all that pubertal angst is toned down, but it has to be there, since its kind of essential to the plot. thanks for your review! Report Review
I'm glad to see you're back. I like the rewrite and this is certainly a good introduction that foreshadows some of what is to come. I had a question about a couple of things though. I'm a bit surprised that Molly Weasley would be open to having help from a house elf, she always seemed to prefer to do things herself (or use them as chores for her children). It makes me wonder if there is a reason she needs help. Second, I'd be surprised if Harry would not know Hermione's handwriting well enough to realize right away that the letters were not from her. Don't get me wrong, it was a good way to draw out the realization of who felt that way about Harry. It just might have been better if you mentioned Harry's impression that it was not Hermione's writing but that she was the only girl he could think of that would write to him.
My email hasn't changed if you want to get back in touch.Author's Response: hey, havent corresponded with you in some time! actually, i cannot access my old email address, and so ive lost all my contacts. could i bother you to drop me a PM in the forums with your email address? im not allowed to post mine here, apparently. Report Review
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