I don't even know why gossip suddenly become intriguing
^ 'Become' should be 'became'
was really in lock down, due to a serious mental issue that Professor Longbottom saw as a threat to the school
^ Oh! Interesting. I'm really intrigued by this. You seem to easily intrigue me because you write really mysterious first chapters. I immediately thought of gossip girl in the end and was glad to see that I was right about the thought. That's actually a really good show, granted I haven't watched it since season two but still, the scandalous things that happen in it are always so interesting!
I'm most interested in James and the mental issue as well as the secret elopment! Will Professors be included in revealing information? Because I wonder what students would elope...they would have to be of age to get married I assume and the secret affairs! You could do so much with that.
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Cool! I wanna read more!!
Keep up the good work!!
padmoonyfoot7: over and out!!Author's Response: Nawww thank you :D x Report Review
Well firstly, I am highly intrigued and I want to know more. This is a really neat idea and I cannot wait to see where you go with this.
I did notice one thing and because I am a bit nit picky I will point it out so please be patient with me...
"snooping through peoples underwear draws"
Did you mean drawers?
As for if I think that this is a boy or a girl.I would have to say boy. There is just something about the mannerisms that make me assume that. I obviously don't know where you are going with this, but if I am wrong I apologize.
Keep up the great work! =)
I can't wait to read more!
-SR17Author's Response: Nah I meant draws(cabinent, chest of draws, tall-bouy.) I'll change the sentence though so it makes more sense. :)
Going with this is going to be slow, because all the characerts in it are actually from all my other Next-Gen fics, so I need to get a few more chapters of each of them out first before chapter 2 of this can come out :/ sad really, but there it is. lol
Ohh - I guess you'll just have to wait and see about the girl/by part :P
Thank you so much for a lovely review :)
Well, this certainly caught my attention. Itís a bit short, but reading it certainly threw up a lot of questions about the character and what is going to happen in the story so itís a good way of drawing people in. One thing that made me perhaps a little concerned is the lengths the character was going to to get these pieces of gossip, having the system of owls and such, and it made me wonder if anyone would actually bother doing all that just to find out gossip. It got me a little worried that all this might conclude on rather shaky and unrealistic ground in the next few chapters when we learn more about the character, but then again, it could be brilliant.
On the technical side of things, I did notice a few mistakes, one was that you didnít capitalise Great Hall, and there was one rather noticeable apostrophe mistake in the first paragraph where you wrote peoples instead of peopleís (the apostrophe in front of the s denotes possession, and the underwear drawers belong to the people), but other than that, you wrote well. One thing, though, I would have liked a few lines of explanation as to who the Watter clan was.
You asked whether I thought the character was male or female. Well, looking at this, I donít think I can really tell. If you hadnít asked me the question, I would have assumed female simply because most main characters in fanfiction are female. However, because youíve asked the question, Iím suspecting heís supposed to be a guy. I donít think the style eliminates either, so I wouldnít question the fact that the character were male.Author's Response: Yeah I did think to myself that the system writing part was going to be really, rlly hard to pull off,so I have to take extra care when writing those parts. Because as you said, it could get really messy when writing it.
As for the grammar errors, I do apologise. This chapter is yet to be beta'd so I haven't had a chance too look over it really myself. But I will and I wll fix it :) Thank you for pointing it out though.
I'll look into the Wotter clan lines, and see what else I can write on them, without given too much detail away. :)
Oh thats a releif, I was hoping that it was alittle like that, so that people wouldn't know who it was, or what sex they were, so I am gald :)
Thank you so much for such an indepth, and honest review, it means a lot!
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keep going, and try to keep the plot different from the actual show, yeah?Author's Response: Nawww thank you!!!
I have planned on keeping it as different from the plot of gossip girl as possible, but some of the characters are similar. And the fnext chapter is similar to GG as well - like very similar, but after that it goes into my own plot line.
For e.g. James Potter is writing a book (dan) but other than that is still his arrognant self ^_^
So other than the net chapter mostly everything else will be mine :P
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I really like this chapter...I am a big gossip girl fan so this seems like a cool idea keep writing :)Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed this chapter - I hope you continue to enjoythe rest ^_^ Report Review
OMG THIS IS AMAZING. Hogwarts Gossip Girl, oh my God... Can so see Rose and Scorpius having a Chuck and Blair relationship!Author's Response: lol you might be surprised at who i've paired up with who :) but I hope you still like it none the less :D
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