Reading Reviews for On The Wind
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Review #1, by Cassius Alcinder The Hunt

27th March 2012:
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This was a very good and well executed idea! Quidditch is so hard to write and you did it so well and made it seem easy here.

The descriptions were very well done and put us right in the middle of the action. We could feel the tension and pressures of the match and the thrill of the chase. I also liked the fact that it wasn't named characters, it helps put the emphasis more on the game. I'm thinking the main character's team probably won!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like the game :D


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Review #2, by BoOkWoRm24 The Hunt

25th March 2012:

This one shot was amazing. Your description was lovely and your vocabulary was equally impressive. You pulled off the quidditch game perfectly.

The fact that we don't know exactly who the narrator was made the entire thing better. The story became more about what was happening rather than who it was happening to.

I only saw one spelling issue. you wrote"The crowd crew mind-numbingly loud " I'm pretty sure you meant the crowd grew because that would've made a lot more sense.
Other than that the grammer was pretty good(not that I'm exactly a grammer expert)

Very well done one shot. I'm pressing the favorite button right now cause it was just that good

Author's Response: I'm so glad you think the game was pulled off nicely. So happy, I had to hold back a squeal of excitement. Writing the game was difficult for me, to say the least.

I'm relatively embarrassed by that mistake, haha. I'll fix that now.

Thank you for taking your time to review!


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Review #3, by Cavell The Hunt

23rd March 2012:
This was brilliant, so beautiful that I don't know what to say. The power of description is in your favour, and I hope the girl's team won! I entered that challenge too, and chose air, and now competition is tough, as yours was brilliant! How on earth am I going to write anything as good as yours? Fantastic one-shot, and an amazing read. Truly one for the favourites.
- Cavell

Author's Response: I'm completely speechless.

Thank you doesn't begin to cover it. I'm extremely happy that you found the description done well; I was worried about that.

I can't wait to see what you write! I'm sure it'll be even more amazing :)


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