Just wanted to let you know that I'm loving your story :) Arthur and Molly are great together, I love comparing them to the older versions of themselves in the books. Please keep writing, I can't wait until the next chapter! Report Review
I was going through the stories and I stumbled across yours and it looked interesting. I've never read a Molly/Arthur story so I figured I would check it out...I'm glad that I did.
I really like this first chapter. I think that the story has started out well. Instead of starting their interaction on the Hogwarts Express, like most people do between their characters you started this in a very unique way. You chose to show Arthur getting sorted.
I liked how you also included Molly's brother and that he was a Prefect. I liked how Arthur is already showing an interest in Molly and being comfortable in her presence even though this is an introduction chapter.
It flows well, and the pace is well balanced with the description. I didn't see any confusing sentences or typos. I wasn't exactly sure of sum-what, but that would be my only criticism. It doesn't take anything away from the chapter at all. I thought it was well written even for being a short chapter.
I am looking forward to seeing what else happens. I will be adding this to my favorites. =)
-SR17 Report Review
Wow! Your stories are amazing! I especially like how one of Molly's friends has MY name! My friends actually call me Fa, cause I love singing. You know, do ray mi FA so la ti do? Anyway, coolio! Report Review
Your chapter was rejected for the following reason:
April 1, 2012 - This story involves the blood traitor Weasley family. Remove them at once, preferably in a painful manner. - Voldemort Report Review
Heya, I've just put my new chapter up and was going through stories and saw that you had eight chapters but no replies from any readers? I'm fixing that now for you, this deserves a review! :)
I really like this. It's interesting to see someone write about the pre life of Molly and Arthur how they met and got together not many people have tried this so I commend you for giving it a go! I love how you describe The Common Room. It sounds so cosy and warm!
It might help you get more reviews if you had a banner for this, so it can stand out? I'd be happy to try and make you one. For ideas of what I do go to my page and the latest story has my latest banner as well as below that!Author's Response: That's so sweet of you! Thanks for the review and I'd love a banner- your stuff looks amazing x Report Review
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