I really like where the plot line is going. I used to fantasize about the whole "transfer student" idea when I thought about fanfics.
I do have a small problem though (not big, nothing bad). It might be just me and I could just be picky about it. But you should keep in mind about the setting of your story. It is set in the Marauder era, which were supposed to be the 70s, and although cellphone where invented by then, I'm sure texting wasn't, and the same goes for iPods (I do love Mumford and Sons though - White Blank Page is a beautiful song) So, just keep that in mind ;)
Also, in the description of the story you said they were in Charlotte, NC and then later on when Teresa and Hannah are talking, Hannah said Seattle? So, again. All about setting. It just confused me a bit. One last thing, is her name September or Teresa? Or is her name Teresa and she'll change it to September?
I know it's hard to keep it 70s when we're in 2012, but maybe googling things you're unsure of could help. Research is part of being a writer :)
Quinn seems like a jerk, didn't that latte burn his face? :O haha
I really like it, so far. :) Keep it up!Author's Response: Thank you so much! When I started writing this story it was in modern times (ish), and then obviously I changed it. I guess I forgot about the texting. Opps. Thanks for pointing that out! I wonder what they had for portable music players back then. Once Again, thank you so much!! Report Review
Meh. Give me your story!! Somehow give it to me! I like this version, and im sure ur edited version is even better! pleaseee meggie?? wuv you! Report Review
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