So much happened in this chapter...goodness. I can't seem to wrap my mind around it, but all I want is from Draco and Hermione to run into each other again so that they can figure out their relationship.
Frankly, it's saddening to see Draco so depressed and drunk out of his mind, and to see Hermione so distressed and angry. Both of them just need to fight harder...in fact, Blaise and Astoria need to fight harder too. None of them are trying to claim their love.
Anyways, your writing and character development has improved drastically since the beginning of this story, and I'm really excited to see what happens next. :) Update soon! Report Review
We have never talked before but here I am! I know it was really naughty of me to laugh at your penname but it was hilarious and so I thought, "This person has to be amazing...I shall read their work!" so here I am! I really like that you've done both a Draco/Astoria (Kind of...) and a Dramione but it doesn't seem to be the typical sort. The only thing is that...the spacing! It drove me mad but it was a very good read and I might just say I like your Draco and I'll be back. I'll most likely add this to my favorites so I can keep track, I have a terrible memory...sigh. Anyway, it would be great to hear from you too! I have a Draco/Astoria on my site called "A Force of Wills" and it'd be neat to hear an opinion on it. Until then! I shall return!
Gabbie Report Review
Well at least Astoria has someone to go to more or less when Draco and Hermione finally get together Report Review
Glad to see you're continuing with this story, curious to see where it goes.x Report Review
I love the concept of our story...
But please make the spacing less because the big gaps annoy me.
That's the only weakness I could find.
Keep writing =) Report Review
such greatness!! :D
Nothing like any other "Draco is getting engaged" story i've read before. The way both narcissa and lucius are so, for lack of a better word, cold is moving. i feel so bad for draco in a way i never have because of how well you describe him and how well hermione understands him.
If anything, i just hope that more interactions will come about between them after this scene. I hope that hermione understands the loneliness he feels (which she has admitted to seeing) to the point where she can figure out his engagement is a sham. Also that he opens up! that poor boy needs a friend and there's none better than Hermione haha...
Again, great story, can't wait for another chapter, you have me begging for more! ;) Report Review
It's a great story! ...And it appears to be completely on it's feet! Keep the chapters coming. Hopefully, Dr will tell his parents to piss off... (Did I just write that?) Report Review
FINALLY! You updated YAY! :) Report Review
Did I ever mentioned how much I feel that Lucius and Narcissa need to get a hobby? They stay in Draco's personal affairs. Nudging him into that crappy engagement is crazy.
Oh and this chapter is the best you have structured your story so far. The breaks and gaps between paragraphs are PERFECT. I guess it's one of those things you adjust over time as your plot develops and your technique improves.Author's Response: Yes, I agree, Draco's parents do need a hobby. I always saw them as self-righteous enough to think it was their justifiable duty to dictate their only son's activities. Including whom he marries. I'm glad you took the time to review! Report Review
There he is, there is the asshole Ron Weasley that we all know and are extremely annoyed with. ;)
Draco knows how to trap Hermione alright, just show the bookworm the family's private library and watch her eyes light up. That's so Hermione! lol Report Review
Ah, spacing is back. It was hard to read, but the chapter was DEVINE! Jealousy is a ugly thing and boy did it make Hermione act out in the worst way. Just snogging Draco like that so openly and in front of a crowd at that.
Draco's reaction to wanting to bed her immediately afterward cracked me up. Typical male, always thinking with his anatomy. lol Report Review
Draco bedding waitresses at galas? Ha...he's such a womanizer. Poor Hermione, she had to stand in for the over-agressive waitress who wanted in on Malfoy's pants. lol
I see your spacing between paragraphs decreased, which is good and makes for a much better reading experience.Author's Response: I am new to this site, and it took me at least a few chapters to determine what I was doing wrong with the spacing problem. The more recent chapters are fixed, and I won't do it again. Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
I am intrigued by your story. Wanting Hermione? You don't say Draco..haha, she's just too lovable, how can you not like her?
My only criticism would be the spacing between paragraphs. The huge gaps made it hard to read and became annoying after awhile, but more than likely you probably fixed that as each chapter progressed, so I am off to read the rest. :) Report Review
I honestly did not expect that to happen. Draco will be furious come tomorrow, I actually may fear for Astoria's life come the next day. lol
I love when Harry plays the big brother role as well.Author's Response: Yes, that's what I was going for! Total unexpected twists! And yes, I always saw Harry as Hermione's big brother, in a way that's so very fitting for Harry Potter. Thank you for reviewing my chapter! Report Review
what a silly fool is he? hmmm, well, i would love to give him a piece of my mind!
btw ur chapters are quite long but i like them!
can't wait to read more! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm very appreciative! Report Review
NO DRACO, HOW COULD YOU LET YOURSELF GET DRUGGED!!! *shakes head in shame* silly boy. I love this fic, it's really interesting and I can't wait to read more! ...Draco knows he loves Granger, he just needs to learn to stand up to Astoria and his parents.Author's Response: Yes, Astoria is getting evil! She wants him so bad she'd resort to such atrocities! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! I hope to continue to impress you. Report Review
I love how Draco came to her rescue with Ron, who was being a complete dick by the way. :p
Draco taking her back to the manor and showing her the library which led to some lovin' was oh so sweet. :)Author's Response: I was never a fan of Ron and Hermione. I mean, Ron and Hermione don't go together very well. I'd much rather see her end up with someone who challenges her. So I thought that it was only fitting to turn Ron into a cheating SOB lol! Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
I love how agressive Hermione was with the kiss. Love your story and I will continue to catch myself up with the chapters now.Author's Response: All I can say is thank you, thank you so much! I'm glad you're enjoying my story! Report Review
Astoria is so devious for this. That deceitful little cow better not get pregnant from this. Draco is being raped, who would have thunk it? I feel bad for Hermione, but it's the way drama goes. Can't wait for more. Please update soon.Author's Response: Yes, Astoria is quite manipulating! I always imagined her as one of those girls that would stop at nothing to get the guy they want! Thank you for reviewing! Most appreciated! Report Review
All I can say is can't wait to read the next chapter.
I love the play of characters and their thoughts in the story.
:) Report Review
The suspense!! It's killing me. DX
I just read all five chapters through and I am absolutely stunned. Although you have jumped into Draco wanting Hermione as quickly as some other Dramione writers, I think you portray the confusion and frustration in their relationship very well. :)
The sweet things they say to themselves just make my heart clench and I really want to see them together in the end. :D Your writing is very articulate, powerful, and moving, I can't wait to see how their relationship progresses.
I kind of hate how they don't know or admit that they love each other but they constantly think about each other...but it adds to the story, definitely. Makes a Dramione what it is. XD Update soon!Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Really made me think of how to follow through with upcoming chapters. I would have taken more time in progressing their feelings towards each other, but I didn't intend for this story to be this long at the beginning. In my opinion, I have always assumed there was more to Draco's feelings towards Hermione than meets the eye, or else he'd never had allowed their relationship to get farther than mere bickering. Furthermore, I must say that Draco's ego and Hermione's obstinateness wouldn't allow them to admit their feelings right away. Kind of like a modern day Pride and Prejudice. Report Review
Please please update soon...Can't wait for the next chapter.I foresee a Draco-Hermione showdown, now that she's read about his engagement!...;)Author's Response: I wish I could update sooner, however life gets in the way sometimes. But i'm glad you're excited to see what happens! Report Review
I'm really enjoying this story so far! I love the dynamics between all of the characters. Nice to see some of the inner turmoil going on with Draco.
Please continue!!!Author's Response: I'm so glad you like my story! I've always saw Draco as affected by the war as anyone else, if not more. Forced to make decisions well beyond his years would make anyone traumatized. Combine that with having been raised by a father such as Lucius, and you're bound to have inner turmoil. I just see Draco's ego allowing him to have a strong front in the face of such emotional chaos, making it easier for him to bear. Report Review
Wow. I read both the chapters (3&4) one after the other and the only word comes to mind is "intense".
You write really well. I was so engrossed in the story that for few minutes there was nothing but the chapters and the characters in them.
The interaction between characters Ron-Hermione, Hermione-Draco, specially in the muggle restaurant - excellent exchange of dialogs...Author's Response: Don't you love getting caught up in a good story? I absolutely do. I'm so very happy that mine is that story for you! I hope I continue to impress you! Thank you for reviewing. Report Review
Very nice style of writing. The composition is perfect. Draco's thoughts are exactly how a younger but mature person would enact.
- The story is interesting and will definitely follow it. Do continue updating as often as possible.Author's Response: Thank you! I really try to get things to make sense, so i'm glad you approve. And when I envision Draco at nearly 30 years old, I have to believe he has matured a little, just not entirely. So thank you for the review! It encourages me to go on! Report Review
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