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Review #1, by Keira7794 Imperfect

19th April 2012:
Did you know I actually gasped in this? Like out loud? That never happens! I was so involved with the story and the characters that I was completely in a world of my own! :P

I really like how you slowly unraveled this piece and also never fully confirmed who the characters are - though I'm guessing it's Teddy and Victorie?

I just really liked this - especially with the return to the glass shattering. It was really clear imagery and set the scene really well.

Great job! xD

Keira :)

Author's Response: Hi!
Did you really gasp!? I've never had anyone say that it's happened before in a review, though really this is my first actual horror-ish type chapter in quite a long time!

I really like personally not knowing who the characters are, it's something I love to read and something I love even more to write. But, yes, you're correct it is Teddy and Victoire, actually it's my first attempt at writing them, so I'm hoping it turned out fine.

I actually got the idea for the glass from accidentally dropping a glass before my writing class. I suppose I was surprised by how far the glass spread when it hit the ground that I just felt I had to use it somewhere. Weird, I know!

I'm glad you liked it and thank you so much for reviewing! :)

~ In The Shadows I Dwell

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Review #2, by Akussa Imperfect

13th April 2012:
Hi! You're tagged and I apologize for the delay!

I really loved this piece. It felt haunting and dark; I had chills trough the entire read, especially the second part. Your descriptions made this scene come to life and the different points of view made it even more beautiful.

It was a really wonderful read; so well written and poetic. Great, great work!

Author's Response: Hi,
That's perfectly alright, I know I'm guilty of putting a tag review off for a little longer, so I understand what it's like :)

I love writing darker type pieces so this was really something I felt comfortable writing, even if the narration style was something incredibly different for me. I wanted to really tell something different, a story centering around a single moment told by two different people and I'm really hoping it worked.

Thank you so much for your review and all your lovely and kind comments!
~ In The Shadows I Dwell

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Review #3, by BeaJerry Imperfect

29th March 2012:
Loved this! Every single Teddy/Victoire I've read are some Taylor Swift fairytale, and this was so refreshing. They're lovely, but this was different and I loved it.
But does he kill her, or turn her into a werewolf? That would be interesting, if she turned into a werewolf... ;)

Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you so much for your review. I guess I wanted to write something dark and as far away from a fairy-tale as I could, and I can certainly imagine this pairing have an anything but perfect relationship and I guess this was how that though came to life when I started writing.

Sadly he kills her in this story, I suppose he just couldn't handle the thought of not being with her or something along those lines. I have considered having him turn her and then making a novel of it, but I think it works better as a one-shot myself. :)

Thanks for your lovely review!

~ In The Shadows I Dwell

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Review #4, by NaidatheRavenclaw Imperfect

29th March 2012:
Wow, this was really beautiful.

I absolutely adore the way you wrote this, with all the repetition and imagery. I'm a huge fan of repetition and stories that twist in a circle like this, so I was already inclined to like it, but your imagery made it that much better. Especially in the second part, Teddy describing Victoire was absolutely incredible. This was so dark and sinister, yet the imagery balanced that so that it began to mess with my mind a little bit. It changed from simply being a very dark story to being a story that was eerily beautiful. This style is really goregeous.

Lovely job!


Author's Response: Hi,
Thank you so much for your review!
I really love stories which use repetition myself, although I also love details so it was really was something entirely new for me to write in this sort of perspective while trying to bring in the things I love. I suppose in a way I feared that would ruin the story I was trying to tell, because well, the narration style was something entirely new.

I don't know exactly what it is, but for some reason I feel that when I'm writing, it's easier to write the dark/horror-ish type stories, I have no idea why, but yeah, this time I actually decided to write something darker than I had before. I really wanted to create a dark atmosphere within the story while really using as much detail as I could, sort of in an attempt to create almost a balance.

Thank you so much for your review and all your lovely comments!
~ In The Shadows I Dwell

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Review #5, by NeverKnew Imperfect

15th March 2012:
Very well written, partially confusing: But very very beautiful.
I love it.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, I suppose I wanted it to be kind of confusing because I really wanted this mysterious sort of atmosphere to be created, but I hope it wasn't too confusing! Thank you so much for your review!

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