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Review #1, by Moondanser83 Bellatrix Lestrange

2nd September 2012:
Such an awesome story.
It's life of Bellatrix... cliff-notes version! LOL
I love the connection you made with her sisters at the beginning. How 'Dromanda refused to be branded. It really set up her character for her adult choices. And Bella's love for Cissy... her dirty little secret. The thought that Bella could truly love someone, anyone, hits hard. Seeing that she was trained to be obsessed with The Dark Lord from birth makes it easy to believe her choices as an adult.
As you read this, you can actually see the madness slowly seeping in, even though she doesn't see it herself.
I love your descriptions of 'pain' - "Pain wasn't violent and red. Pain was cool and blue..." being my favorite.
And of course I did my little happy dance in my seat when you pulled out the best line of the series ;)
I love how at the end the concept of death barely phases her - only the fact that she won't be able to protect her beloved sister anymore. Brilliant.
The only CC I have is there is one line at the beginning that seems to be out of tense.

"Dromada hadn't been talking to Bellatrix."

The way it's connected to the rest of the sentence feels like it should be more along the lines of:

'Dromadad hadn't spoken to Bellatrix.'

That's all I have as far as CC.

Excellent story!!
~Moon~

Author's Response: Thanks! Love it when people do favorite quotes! You just made my day!

Thanks so much for the review and the criticism! It's always welcome here :)


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