Heh. That was pretty cute. Good job. There are some small spelling and grammar mistakes, but overall I think it was pretty good.
My only problem was James (a bit). I think his characterization is a little off. I can see him following Lily around like that a lot, but he seems pretty rude in this. That just doesn't fit James for me, becuase I find that he was rather sweet towards Lily in their later years at Hogwarts especially after the incident when he saved Snape's life. It might just be me, but I think James just seems a bit off. Maybe it's just because I love James, but I don't know. He seemed a bit rude.
Anyhow, good story. I like your writing. :) Report Review
Haha this is so funny, I love how it wasn't exactly a romance, and you used the quote so well :) Report Review
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