This is the best one-shot I have ever read!
10/10 :DAuthor's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate that you took the time to review :D Report Review
LMAO! LOVED IT! Absolutely LOVED it! Best thing I have read in a long time. Great job! Hilarous!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you like it. I wasn't entirely sure if it was very funny and so I'm relieved to hear that you think so. Report Review
Oh...My...God...That was absalutly amazing! As I have braces and I'm not allowed to eat apples this was horrible to read because now, I wanna apple D: But I mean horrible to read beause of the apples, not because it was a horrible story (Gah I'm getting myself all confused)
Anyway, this was written perfectly and I spotted now flaws or grammar mistakes. The only probelm I have is that the paragraphs are too far apart for my liking as if they're trying to make the one-shot look bigger and sorry to say it's not working out for me. But don't panic, thats the only fault I have with it at the moment.
My favorite line in the who thing has to be the one in the summary, thats a brillient line :D And the summary is a perfect, makes you wanna go ahead and read the hell out of the story so a really good job there. Don't tell anyone else, but this is my favorite entry so far so I think you have a good shot at first place ;)
Amazing one-shot you have here, good job!
Snoopy xAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I wasn't entirely sure about this and so thank you a million times.
I'm really sorry about the paragraphs. It was not intentional. I didn't realize they were so far about and I'll definitely fix it as soon as I can.
I'm sorry about your braces. I know how horrrible they are D:
And thanks again! I'm so excited for this challenge. It was so much fun to write this! Report Review
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