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Review #1, by NaomiMiller New Friends

19th March 2012:
I like the new characters. Mel seems pretty interesting. The transistions in both this chapter and the first chapter seem a little disjointed, making it hard to follow the story at some points. The only other thing that I have a question of is when Mel meets Harry. Most everyone in the Wizarding World has heard of him before, so wouldn't she, as a sixth year know at least who he is? Other than that, I liked it! Can't wait to see what Mel and Zoey are up to.

Author's Response: Sorry. The next chapters will be much smoother in transitions. I promise. I based Mel off of myself. I don't really pay attention to people unless they're in my group of friends. Thanks for being the first to review my new story Naomi. Thanks a lot :)

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