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Review #1, by SevSnape13 The Sorting

19th March 2012:
Not bad!!! A little confusing, but it was cleared up!! Good job :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback!
I'll be updating either today or tomorrow :')


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Review #2, by ravenclaw_slytherin The Arrival

3rd March 2012:
I like this story so far! I don't usually read Mauraders (I'm about 95% sure I spelled that wrong), but this caught my eye, and I'm glad it did.

I love bothe characterization of Lily and Snape here. I think a lot of stories tend to give the two of them very extreme characters: Snape is this evil, lurking figure and Lily as this overly tempremental person, but I think you acheived a good balance in their characters. They seem very interesting and i'm excited to see where you'll go with them!

While I love POV switching, and think that switching POV's is great and adds to a story, I think that you might have added one or two few too many POV changes in this chapter. I think they were a few too many because reading the changed POVs seemed to break up the flow a bit, if you get what I mean. Otherwise this story flowed well, so my only constructive comment would be to maybe reduce the POV changes.

Overall, I'm so excited to see where you take Lily, Snape, and the gang's characters! Update soon! :D

Author's Response: First off: thanks for reading! :')
And I do agree with your opinion about the switching POV's. I'm currently revising the second chapter, and the second chapter is a lot longer so it might take a little while to get posted, and it might change depending on whether or not I'll split it into two chapters.

And, in my idiocy, I've decided to start another fanfiction, so I'll probably end up alternating between updates.

Thank you for taking the time to write a review. :') It really means a lot to me.

Cheers!xx


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