okay i love this story and all but it hasn't been updated in months and i cam back to check thinking there would be a few more chapters up but there's not!Author's Response: I am ever so sorry! I have been meaning to come up with new ideas, but one has not struck me yet. I hope that I will find inspiration again. Thank you! Report Review
Oh my i've been waiting for another chapter for months! Please tell me you'll be updatiing this soon?! :)Author's Response: Oh, I'm so sorry! >.<
I just came back from a wifi-less vacation, and things have been crazy!
I'll try to update as soon as possible ;) Report Review
Absolutely love the story.
And Lily. Don't even ask why, 'cause it's too long of an explanation.Author's Response: Haha, wow, thanks! (again :D )
Lily! I love her too :3 :D
(Haha, why? :3 Just kidding! ;) )
Thank you for all your lovely reviews! I really appreciate them, and I hope you continue reading on~
Sam :) Report Review
I actually love Pomfrey :D
The last few chapters have been amazing, my dear, but this one was to be my favourite so far!
Sorry it's short, love,
Sophie xoxoAuthor's Response: Haha, me too :)
Awww, thanks :) even though i don't really think so... D: sigh.
no worries! I love your reviews ;)
xxSamxx Report Review
SAM. SAM. SAM.
I LOVE IT. I LOOOVE IT.
Well done, old bean. Well done.
Can't wait to read the next chapter! Love, Sophie xoxoAuthor's Response: AW, THANKS! :D :happy dance:
Love you too, Sam xx
(i know it's a short response, so sorry about this :P ) Report Review
I think you're using the term 'mudblood' too often. Sirius and James wouldn't call Lily that, because that is a very strong word. I can't really explain in words, but you shouldn't use mudblood too much.
You're writing style is good, but I'd get an editor if I were you. And the plot is going much too fast. Go into detail more, because these vague descriptions are confusing me.
This is just constructive criticism, not a flame ^.^Author's Response: And I think you're right! :) I know Sirius and James wouldn't call Lily that :sigh: but i thought that the story needed a little dramatic push or else the story would get boring and reviews would stop rolling in. :sigh again: And wow, thanks! :D But err...what do you mean by editor? Haha, sorry, I'm hopeless ;) Yeah, I believe that the plot is going a little too quickly too, but the thing is, it's kind of hard to find the perfect measure of "good detail" and "entertaining". :groan: I have yet to figure out how to do it :( And by vague descriptions, would it be possible to give me a example? :D Then, i would know how to improve my writing ;)
And don't you worry, I know the difference between constructive criticism (yours really helped! :D) and fiery darts of poison ^^
I'll keep your advice in mind! ;)
stephanie (aka sam) Report Review
oh..my..goodness! i wasn't expecting this at all! O.O Aida.who's she? Oh my goodness! She can't possibly be Potter's girfriend, can she? Oh my god! But she doesn't act like it.no! It can't be...James is using her??? O.o This chapter is so intriguing! Get another one out soon please! :)Author's Response: Yes, this chapter was a bit..unclear and weird. To be honest with you, I'm not too happy with it actually.Haha, all these questions! :) Unfortunately I can't answer them, as it would be giving away some future secrets ;) I'll try my best to get another chappie out, no worries ;) Report Review
James is so mean! Please please please get another chapter out soon!Author's Response: Why, yes, he is! And i'll try my best! ;) Report Review
Meller??? Who's he??? I need to know!! XDAuthor's Response: Read and find out! :P :D
I need the next chapter!! This is so, so, so, so, so, so addicting!!!Author's Response: aw, thanks! I'll try to update asap!
Aw, lily, forgive Madeleine already!! :'( :) you write wonderfully!!!Author's Response: Oh, thank you! :) Report Review
AW! I love how James gets to carry lily in this chapter!!! :)Author's Response: yes, that's my favorite part! :D Report Review
I looovve this story!! It's so addicting!Author's Response: aw, thanks, huney. ;) Report Review
Oh! I can't wait until I see what lily for next! :PAuthor's Response: You'd just have to wait and see! :P :D Report Review
JAMES IS A GIT! can you possibly stick him in a cage that he can never escape so people can laugh at him until he apologizes to Lily? no, im serious.Author's Response: YES! Or, even better: Let's dig a gigantic pic and fill it up with brussel sprouts and rotten bananas. Then we push him in, and the entire population of the world can go and laugh at him :D Thanks for the review ;) Report Review
I'm sorry but I have to say this because it really bugged me in this chapter because..well, you know how Dumbledore called "Lily Potter" "EVANS", well, the thing is I really think that if that really was Dumbledore he would have called "Lily Potter" "LILY" not "EVANS" because it just doesn't sound right when Dumbledore calls Lily "Evans" and don't get me wrong, I'm not trying to sound mean or anything, it's just that really bugs me and annoys me whenever Dumbledore calls "Lily", "Evans" *sigh* (really sorry for the long review) But anyways, this chapter was your best yet, KEEP IT UP!!!Author's Response: haha! lily...evans. lily..not evans :D I'll try to remember that so it doesn't bug you anymore ;) thank you for reviewing! :) I appreciate it ;) Report Review
now THAT was AWESOME! Please, PLEASE write MORE!!! I cannot wait for the next chapter! And I love how James is ignoring Lily in this chapter! It just sets the mood for Lily to fall in love with him, (maybe)Author's Response: thanks! :) I don't know, but the idea just came to me that perhaps..just MAYBE James started ignoring Lily to get her attention. thanks for the review! Report Review
THat was the shortest chapter EVER!!! WHere's the rest???Author's Response: I KNOW!! :D I've been agonizing over it! But, haha, thanks for the review ;) Report Review
Oh my gosh, What happens next, what happens next?! This is sooo good!!! :) Author's Response: awww! thanks :) i lovveee your reviews, by the way ;) Report Review
This is really AWESOME so far, so PLEASE keep it UP!Author's Response: aw! thank you sooo much! :D i enjoy your reviews a LOT :) i hope you continue reading ;) Report Review
I loved it! Write another chapter quick, please!Author's Response: I PROMISE :D Well, maybe not so much on the "quick" part, but hehe, I'll try my very best to get another chapter out.soon (hopefully) :D Report Review
why is this chapter so small?? its so nice though...i really like this story!! when is the next chapter coming out??!! cant wait! xDAuthor's Response: haha :D this chapter is a bit short, isn't it >__< school has been killing me XP. i promise you a nice long chapter next time, ok? :D I'll try to update as soon as possible. Thanks for the compliments and for reviewing! :) Report Review
I really like your story! I think that the fight between Lily and her best friend was really sad cause it sucks to have friends torn apart, and also a bit irrational but that's what anger and rage do to you i guess. And i must admit, i probably would have done the same thing as Lily. I think you write all the characters really well and i hope you continue this story! PS. I love your banner! :)
RavenclawWayToBeAuthor's Response: Thanks! :) I also agree that fights between friends (especially close ones) are depressing :(. I actually based some of the story plot on my life experiences ;). Oh, and yes, thanks! When i saw the banner in the up for grabs section, my mouth practically went kabam! to the floor :) Thanks for reviewing! :) i really appreciate it. :) Report Review
its soo goood!! when is the next chapter coming out???Author's Response: awww! thanks! :) I'll try to update as soon as possible ;) Report Review
You really got Lily's character. I don't know why nobody has been reviewing this but you should try getting a banner - people are usually attracted to stories with banners. Try looking on the Dark Arts. They have some really cool banners that account members make - you can send in a request or some do grabs where you can just tell the person that you are taking the banner and they let you.
GREAT STORY!! KEEP WRITING 10.10Author's Response: Aww thanks :) I already have an artist working on a banner for me, but thanks any way. I really appreciate it :) Thanks so much for reviewing! :) Report Review
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