Ooh this got creepy :P
Very well written, I liked the way you built up the air of oppression and duty surrounding the Black sisters. It gave me a sense of both why Bellatrix felt such a need to conform and Andromeda such a need to be free. I especially liked the part where you mentioned Bella being proud of her Dark Mark and showing it off with her sleeves rolled up- it seemed very in character.
If I were to pick something to improve on I think it would be that you could have drawn out the suspense a little more and maybe put a little more detail into Narcissa first discovering Andromeda's "betrayal" and right at the end when you talk about Andromeda's effect of Bellatrix and then Narcissa's feelings for her son. In some places, I did feel like I wanted about how Narcissa was feeling and what she was thinking.
However, I really loved your last scene with Bellatrix. It was interesting (and spooky!) seeing her having made the transition from innocent to killer and her platitudes coupled with your great descriptions of the blood on her hands made it a really vivid piece of writing.
The Black sisters are so interesting!
Very well done :) Report Review
I loved your take on how Bellatrix became a Death Eater and how Andromeda left. While reading this I saw Narcissa in a new light and I love how you portrayed her. I wish we could've seen something like this in the books or movies, 10/10 :)Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! :D Report Review
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