And here I thought they might've had the usual husband-wife fight and he just stormed out or something. The end was just truly heart touching! I could actually feel Hermione's sadness when she said, 'I love you, Harry.' It's a very good story, however, you mentioned that she's been avoiding using magic after Harry left. And then later she just decided to apparate? It just sort of seemed contradictory. You could've added in more material regarding Harry's death or where Ginny or Ron is. I don't think anybody would just leave Hermione like this; all alone. But I suppose, if you look at it from the point of the song, it was pretty well done! You managed to make the story follow the song which was wonderful! Great job!
~RecenseoAuthor's Response: Thank you very much!! I love it when reader leave reviews saying how they think the story could be improved. It really does help. But also, I'm happy that you like the story. Thi isn't one of my better ones so it thrills me to know someone likes it. Thanks again!! Report Review
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