So, you asked me to look at your work, so here I am. It was good. Obviously Draco is drastically different, but you give an explanation for that, which is good. There were a few typos and grammar issues, but on that front it was pretty good. I like the idea so far, clearly it's just the beginning, so it's hard to tell. I will say, hermione's interaction and dialogue with her parents is too dramatic and unrealistic. Try to write it like you would actually say it to your parents. Other than that, great start! -gocnocturna Report Review
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