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Review #1, by Olivia Hello there, Stranger.

11th May 2012:
Hiya,

It's Olivia :) what were you talking about earlier!? Your hpfanfics are amazing! I really like the way that you wrote it in the past tense because it was like a memory and the last 5 lines are so beautiful. I think you should maybe do another one but see how it is in the first tense and perhaps do 2 chapters one for each characters views? (or more if there's other characters.) Finally, you know I was saying earlier that i re-read mine a realised it had too much speaking? Well I think you could add parts in between your speaking too, so as to make it more flowing and story like if that makes sense? Anyway I kind of went off on a rant there so if you don't use any of my ideas it's fine!

Love Olivia x

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really greatful that you reviewed, because as you can see, I don't get many...

Thank you for the advice too, I'll take a look at the speech to description ratio. I like the idea of doing a second chapter from Rolf's point of view, so I might just take you up on that x :)


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Review #2, by ewsoucf7 Hello there, Stranger.

29th February 2012:
Here's the review I promised!
Hiyaaa!

I decided to choose this one cause nobody had reviewed it yet!

I must say I think you've done a great job with Luna. It wasn't OOC at all which was quite refreshing! I loved the communication between her and Rolf. I think you've written it very well. They do appear to be perfect for each other.

I loved the layout of the fic too. It's unusual to see many different aspects of their lives and for it to work well, but I think you found the balance between them.

There was one spelling error, though I think it was more of a typo.

"It was my Fourth of Fifth year at Hogwarts"

That was the only negative. Other than that the fic was very well written and a lovely read. =]

Author's Response: Thank you!

I'm really gad that you liked it, I was a little worried about writing as Luna, because she can be so odd, and it was difficult to know how far to take that.

But I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it, thanks for the review!


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