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Review #1, by adluvshp The Start

18th July 2012:
Hey!

This was a nice insight into Fenrir. I especially liked the introduction. It was so nicely written. The entire story flowed well. The portrayal of young Fenrir and his family was well crafted. The entire narrative was good too.

All in all, I really liked the story, especially the last line, that was cool xD

Good work!

9/10

Cheers!
AD

Slytherin for the cup 2012!

Author's Response: Hey!

I'm glad you liked the intro and such. And that it flowed and all that stuff.

Last line? *Checks* Oh hehe :P Wollveees.

Thank you! :D

Mike.


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Review #2, by Aguamenti123 The Start

22nd May 2012:
It's goood :D And you do need to continue this, because I really love the presentation of the other side of Fenrir, because I hated him before :) And it isn't mainstream! Yay! Also I like the description altogether, especially the bit when he looks at the moon. But yeah, do carry on :D

-Olive

Author's Response: Haha! Glad you liked this! And how could you EVER hate Fenrir?! ;) I sure hope it's not mainstream :P And yay for liking my description! I will carry on.

Thanks for reviewing!

Mike.


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Review #3, by TheHeirOfSlytherin The Start

5th April 2012:
Oh, young Fenrir sounds so cute! With his family... I read this and I'm like "what happened to you to change from such a loving little boy to a monster!"

Definitely a defining moment right there!

Great start to this, Mike! I look forward to reading more!

Sam.

Author's Response: Hehe. Thanks Sam! I need to get a move on with this... I really do. Glad you enjoyed it!

Mike.


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Review #4, by starryskies55 The Start

4th April 2012:
I did enjoy it Mike, I did :P

N'aww, the family unity was very cute, and unified. I liked Fenrir's way of interacting with the twins, and also that they called him 'Fenny'- it's a great childlike twist on his frankly, evil-sounding name. Fenrir. Sounds wolfy. (I mean, Remus LUPIN. He was just asking to be bitten).

So much love for Chew ♥

And I'm loving all the foreshadowing. The moon, and the dreaming, and the dad-coming-into-the-bedroom... from that, I'm guessing that a) something bad is going to happen to his family, or b) from the wording of 'your people' rather than 'family' I would guess he transfers his loyalty to a werewolf pack.

The contrast of happy mother and sad father was very intriguing... wonder what's going to happen. o.O

Overall, a great chapter :D LOVE IT!

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it! Hehe, I didn't even realize how childish it did sound.

Chew! xD

I won't reveal anything right now but stuff is going to happen in maybe... 2, possibly 3 chapters. Hehehe.

Oooo you noticed that.

Thanks! :D So glad you loved it!

Mike.


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Review #5, by BKL8008 The Start

28th February 2012:
Interesting start. I once touched on a bit of Greyback's possible childhood in one short stand-alone story. It will be very interesting to see where you go with this.

Author's Response: Thanks! I think I've read those bits you've had about Greyback... Not sure. I hope this is going to be a good read!

Mike.


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Review #6, by Millarz The Start

24th February 2012:
Hehe you just try to make me cry with this story 3:) I'm waiting. This is a nice start to a solemn novel! Unfortunately, I was smirking through it all because of my little challenge for you :P I like what the father told Fen at the end. There's just one thing I didn't catch before. "'Mother! I'm home!' I yelled out cheerfully, alerting to mother that father and I were home." Oh really? Yelling "I'm home!" alerts his parents that he's home? Shocker! ;) What I'm trying to say is the "alerting to mother..." is repetitive. Perhaps you could say "as father and I walked through the door" or something like that. Other than that, great job! First review!

Author's Response: Smirking... It's not even sad yet! Pshhh I've just barely started... >:D hehehehe. I'll fix that... I will... There's probably a few other mistakes throughout this... And THANKS MILLZ! :D

Mike.


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