Hey there! So sorry for the long time it took me to get this review across. School is crazy, at least mine is! :P
Well...I don't know if I should be happy or sad. To be honest, I'm kind of in-the-between. I realise that this is one of those 'leave it the rest to the reader's imagination' because there wasn't much specific details on it. Such as why are there so many tombstones? And to satisfy myself, I pretended that they were from the war.
I thought the story was really good, there was a lot of focus on the emotion. And the story flowed quite really well! This was such a great read. :D
CloakAruro9 xxAuthor's Response: Thank you!!! I never really thought about the 'leave it to the reader's imagination' stuff either, so I guess it's 'leave it to the reader's and disorganized author's imagination'. I guess the tombstones could be from the war. I don't know . . .
Thanks for the review, finally! Just kidding, i know school can be busy :)
~Delia Report Review
Hey! I love this! I really did, your descriptions are beautiful, it was so poetic. It was short and sweet, yet bitter. So well crafted and the flow of the story was near perfect. I saw this was written for the out of your comfort zone challenge, and this style of writing can be difficult (trust me, I know) but it seems like you've done really well on it. I also loved the ending, how it just ended. Just like that. An all round great peice!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was on the fence about posting this, but then I thought, what the hell, and decided to go ahead and post it. It was for the out of your comfort zone challenge after all, and the worst that can happen is that no one reads it. And people reviewed it, so I'm happy.
Thanks for the review, again, 100 times over.
~Delia Report Review
I like that you get a different felling at each part from the words that you use. Lost in the first, traped in the second and that the end you have hope but you always fell that they fell alone. I wonder how he came to live in a graveyard... I think that you have good flow here. I like that each part also seems the same length of time and the its all equal. I love the end line because you know that he is at peace with the out come.Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) Report Review
Hmm, this story was something to think on. I liked that you wrote something different, though I don't really understand it. I think you had amazing description and the way you worded it, was fantastic. I thought it was cool that you left out any names, it was left to the imagination. Were the gravestones from the wizarding war, or something else? Even though i don't 100 percent understand it, i still think you wrote it really well!
-RavenclawWayToBeAuthor's Response: Yeah, I wasn't thinking a lot about regular details, like surroundings or stuff like that, when I wrote this. I was more focused on the emotions and goals. The gravestones, are again, something I left up to the imagination, they can be from the wizarding war if you want them to be, or they could be from somewhere else. It doesn't matter. Report Review
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