this seems like a good story line. when are you going to update? Report Review
Okay, your first story, okay. First advice, it's a good plot. Your voice makes it interesting. And, If I were you I would get a Beta. Go over your writing rules on commas. (that was the first thing I noticed.) You have potential as a writer, might as well make it great. Writing is a learning experience.
I shall see where you go with this, next chapter :)Author's Response: Thanks so much and thanks so much for your advice and your right I'm definitely getting a beta. This is not my native language so I'm kind of working on it, your help is greatly appreciated. Report Review
Nice start. It looks like you are giving differrent approach to the aurar thing, than we usually read. Looking forward for more.Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I know this is going to be different approach for whole Aurar thing than usual, you will see/read a lot more later.
thanks for the review. Report Review
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