You're so skilled :') Report Review
I really loved this story. I thought you did a masterful job of taking us on an emotional journey through Andromeda's life. You picked some really important moments and gave us insight into what she was thinking and feeling and you managed to weave it all together with astronomical metaphors in a very natural-sounding and seamless way.
The way that you jumped around in time kept me really paying attention. I didn't have any trouble figuring out which period of her life each section was taken from, but it was revealed through the details. I thought that was a really good technique for keeping the reader focused.
I really loved the way that you contrasted the three Black sisters and where Andromeda fit into the puzzle. Your characterizations of Bellatrix and Narcissa were perfect for me. Poor Annie suffered the fate of middle siblings the world over: neither the dominant one nor the precious baby of the family. So she turns inward and loses herself in her study of the stars.
My other favorite moment was when she finally allowed herself to be angry back at her father. For a girl who'd grown up in the shadow of her family legacy the way that she did, that was a huge moment for her. Casting off all those years of conditioning to finally let herself be happy.
Your characterization of Ted was pretty awesome. He was warm and loving, but he also was upset and hurt and a little angry when he found out that she hadn't told her family about him. That was a nice touch.
The first section didn't make sense until after I read the last one, but that really worked out in your favor, I thought. I wasn't entirely sure how Teddy and Harry related to the story until I realized that she was on her way to visit Ted's grave.
So I did notice a few small typos as I was reading:
But it never did and she regret in that thought. - There's something off about the sentence. I'm not exactly sure where you were going with the thought.
It had not been her first outing with a boy before. - I don't think you need the word "before" on the end of this sentence.
Overall, your writing was really solid. Expressive and full of emotional punch, and everything flowed really nicely. Good job! Report Review
very good story :D really enjoyed all of it :)Author's Response: thanks! glad you enjoyed it :) Report Review
The first thing that came to my mind when I finished this story is "that's beautiful". It was beautifully written and the love story of Andromeda and Ted is so beautiful in itself. It was so sweet and sad and peaceful. I just loved it!Author's Response: thanks so much for the lovely review, i actually haven't read an andromeda/ted story yet -blush- so i hope i portrayed them well. thanks for making my day :) Report Review
Hi Grace, it's MrsPotter from TDA. A review as promised.
This was really amazing! The writing is so beautiful and I love how you have the whole space theme :)
I'm close to tears right now, it was just so heartbreaking but so AMAZING! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!! I would really like to see more of your work. Are you planning to write anymore? If you do submit something, please PM me and let me know :)
10/10 and an add to favourites! :) xxAuthor's Response: thanks so much for the lovely review eilidh! i'm glad i evoked such an emotional response. i'm hoping to write more in the future :) xx Report Review
This was by far one of the most incredible pieces of writing I've ever read on here and from other sites. I loved the entire star/space theme that shaped the whole plot line. The descriptions of the three sisters was lovely, my favourite was "She was the epitome of contrast: pale skinned, dark haired, heavy lidded with lips tainted to the shade of blood. From the first taste, she had always suffered from bloodlust. She wanted to be powerful. She wanted change. She was a star, bright but burned young."
Amazing job. I really enjoyed this unexpected fic about Andromeda since not many people pay attention to her. xoxoxoAuthor's Response: Is it terrible that I'm really blushing and flustered right now? Thank you so much! Funny story, I used to really like astronomy and I though why not try to incorporate that into my first ever piece of fan fiction.
Thanks for the review! It made my day :) Report Review
1010101010101010! I really don't usually read one shots but this is so beautiful. Its amazing how you can incorporate so many things into one. I thought this was really well written and it brought tears to my eyes.Author's Response: Ack! First reviewer :D Thank you so much it really means a lot to me that you responded so emotionally. I know what you're saying about one shots because before I didn't normally read them as well but some of them are so poetic!
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