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Review #1, by Jchrissy Autumn Leaves

12th February 2013:
Hi there! I love a good mystery!

I can't believe how different this Victoire is than usual. It's so awesome to have her as a kick butt kind of personality, and I loved that you were able to use the Rookie to smoothly give us an idea of Victiore's appearance and show us what being a woman in the Auror office took.

I couldn't imagine anyone that followed in Harry and Ron's footsteps really had it easy. Family's loyal, but on the job family is just another worker. And not only that, but it seem Victiore had to go the extra mile to prove herself even more capable than the boys. Or equally as capable.

The kind of speech you've given her... clipped words made for no nonsense, was my favorite part of this chapter. Although I found myself want to see her get all dolled up for a date or something along those lines :P

And she died her natural blonde hair?! It fits what you've shows us of her character so far, but I'm not happy about it. If you've been blessed with that natural gorgeous color of hair, you should be thankful for it. (Coming from a jealous girl who can't get her hair anything lighter than not quite black :P)

I loved the introduction to Teddy and the competition you've created between them. I'm excited to find out what's behind all this!

This was a really awesome first chapter, I look forward to continuing!!

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Review #2, by blackzero Autumn Leaves

29th July 2012:
Wow
Honestly there exist a sane writer who writes Teddy/Vic fic without getting Dom pregant.

Brilliant Plot. Superb.

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Review #3, by starryskies55 Autumn Leaves

11th March 2012:
Oh Good Lord. A Victoire/Teddy with no Victoire/Teddy? (yet) This looks amazing.

I love spy-y, Auror sneaky sneaky action stuff, and this is a fantastic first chapter! WOW. What's up between Vic and Ted? What's up with the murdered guy? What's up with Uncle Harry? Wha-?

Muchly intrigued, and your dialogue is funny, your descriptions immense and Vic's slant on everything is superb :D 'We had no need for frills, jewellery or pink.' I already love this Vic, and she's so different to all the other ff's Victoires!

Awesome.

Over and out, SHPFFO :D

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Review #4, by rupertlover Autumn Leaves

17th February 2012:
Wow, I love this start! It is quite different from other fanfic stories, but that's a good thing!! I like how Victoire and Teddy haven't spoken for awhile because you normally find that they are in love and stuff.
This is great, 10/10!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I'm glad you liked it :)

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Review #5, by atellam Autumn Leaves

17th February 2012:
I'm not quite sure why you don't have any reviews on this yet, as it's really quite brilliant. An interesting characterization of Victoire, one that I personally haven't seen before, and different from the normal 'Teddy and Vic get married/engaged in the first two chapters' fic, so well done on that one.

I'm interested to see where this plot goes and will pop back to read the next chapter when I have a chance.

The one thing I'd really encourage you to do, is check out the forums. (Writers Resources -> Grammar Guidelines -> Everything You Ever Wanted To Know About Dialogue) Your dialogue its self is great, which is a lovely change from the forced dialogue you see in most first chapters of stories (as Authors haven't developed their characters enough to work out their own 'voice' yet) but with work on your dialogue tags, this would read even better; a smoother flow to the chapter. I'm not even going to try and explain it as the forums do a much better job ^_^

Anyway, in short, this is really good and such a lovely change from most fics, so well done. I hope the lack of reviews doesn't discourage you as they will come with time. Keep up the writing, because you show real promise,
- Adele :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I really did want to create a different sort of Victoire from what we usually see, especially since there's no canon evidence that says she ended up as a model, as most people seem to portray her ;)

Dialogue tags are actually something I've worked on before, there's generally two competing ideas with them, two 'schools', if you will. At the moment, I'm slightly stuck between the two (one is to only ever use 'said', there's a few well published literary author's who only ever do that, as they believe that the dialogue should speak for itself (i.e you don't need to say 'muttered', the dialogue itself and the physical description of the person and the scene should say that for you) and the other, obviously, is to use the wider range). There's also the idea of not using them at all - can be confusing, but does sometimes take away from the excessive description that you can get with dialogue tags.

Anyway, I actually do know that area of the forums, as I'm almost always over at the HPFF forums ;)

Thank you so much for the review. And don't worry, nothing will discourage me from writing this. I've been here long enough to know better than to expect reviews!

Thank you :)


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