ah I love this story this is the third time I've read it! pleAse write more teddy and victoire fanfiction!!!
you're such a good writer!Author's Response: Wow, I am honored :) Thank you so much! Maybe inspiration will come again soon. Report Review
I know this was a one-shot...and I absolutely loved it until the very end.it seemed like you were just rushing the ending. You are an excellent writier, so go for it! Develop your story line.either end it with the James Potter line and let it be a one-shot or take it through several chapters and let their story-line develop. But, you really have talent!Author's Response: I had been wondering if the end was a bit rushed, so thanks for your input :) I will probably just take off the end, thank you :) Report Review
Hi, it's me reviewing the entries for the First Date Challenge (I know, finally).
This was a very enjoyable story, though I would like to have seen a bit more of their first date, but I enjoyed the whole dynamic between them. Good jobAuthor's Response: Thanks so much!! I am glad you liked it :) Report Review
HI again! Congrats on winning my First sentence challenge by the way :)
This is a great story! I especially love the way that you described Teddy's eyes, wow! I also love this end bit ""Ted and Vickie sitting in a tree, K-I-S-S-I-N-G!"
Oh, curse you, James Sirius Potter!
We'll just cut the scene there because some language used may not be appropriate for any age."
However, the last but where you wrote that they get married etc is probably not needed but if you want to still keep it, I think that you could probably fix it up a bit because it seems very rushed.
I also really love your title and I realize now how it fits in with the story, very clever :)
potterweasleygranger/hedwigs_themeAuthor's Response: Wow thank you so much! I am honored! I appreciate your input, by the way :) Thanks :)
That story was soo good! I think you found a good combination of humor and romance in this story so that it was short, but sweet! I loved her little comments in her head like, 'I know, I hate his daft, slutty admirers too.' I actually cracked up when you put that line! And the whole thing with love at first slap was funny too! I think this was a cute one-shot!
-RavenclawWayToBeAuthor's Response: Haha thank you ever so much, you don't know how much this means to me, as this one did kind of make me nervous. My all time favourite first person POV to write is the sarcastic mild humour that I associate with Victoire for some reason, so I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. Thank you so much for reviewing, I am so glad you liked it :) Report Review
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