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Review #1, by maraudertimes Love at First Slap

7th February 2014:
Hi!

This certainly was such a cute little thing, but there are a few things I need to address:

First, Victoire should be in fifth year if she's 15. If you absolutely have to be 11 before being accepted into Hogwarts as a first year (which is true), you absolutely have to be 12 to be in second year, 13 to be in third year, and 16 to be in sixth year. Just a little thing.

Also, I feel as though Victoire is really wishy-washy. She starts off seemingly hating Teddy (well, she doesn't want anyone to know that she likes him and she doesn't agree to go on a date with him), but then she goes and says she loves him. I know that teenagers are emotional and impulsive, but saying I love you that quickly? Personally (so feel free to ignore me), it seems extremely rushed.

Other than that though, it was really cute. I loved Victoire's little step backs whenever she says Teddy is cute/hot/sexy/etc. It was really funny to see and it seems like exactly what someone in her position would do!

I also completely loved how James made an appearance at the end. It's a little mirror of what happened in the epilogue of sorts in DH, so that little canon mirror imaging was really cute and really helped lend an aura of realness to the story!

Also, the eyes? They sound gorgeous. The description was really nice there and I think you wrote it beautifully!

Great job!
Lo:)

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Review #2, by MrsKatieGrint Love at First Slap

9th January 2014:
Hey there again!

Oh goodness! I loved Victorie's voice in this story. It was so realistic for an almost 16 year old. I thought this was a nice spin on a fairly typical couple, where everyone makes them love eachother other since forever.

I thought it was cute how Victorie was trying to hold out on Teddy, but I'm glad she tossed that out, and decided to go on the date.
Did I mention my heart melted when Teddy told her their date meant everything?

This was such a cute a fantastic little read, and such a big jump from the other story I reviewed, but it was wonderful all the same!(:

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Review #3, by cattycatty Love at First Slap

19th January 2013:
ah I love this story this is the third time I've read it! pleAse write more teddy and victoire fanfiction!!!
you're such a good writer!

Author's Response: Wow, I am honored :) Thank you so much! Maybe inspiration will come again soon.

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Review #4, by Diana Love at First Slap

21st October 2012:
I know this was a one-shot...and I absolutely loved it until the very end.it seemed like you were just rushing the ending. You are an excellent writier, so go for it! Develop your story line.either end it with the James Potter line and let it be a one-shot or take it through several chapters and let their story-line develop. But, you really have talent!

Author's Response: I had been wondering if the end was a bit rushed, so thanks for your input :) I will probably just take off the end, thank you :)

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Review #5, by Siriusgirl Love at First Slap

4th September 2012:
Hi, it's me reviewing the entries for the First Date Challenge (I know, finally).
This was a very enjoyable story, though I would like to have seen a bit more of their first date, but I enjoyed the whole dynamic between them. Good job

Author's Response: Thanks so much!! I am glad you liked it :)

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Review #6, by hedwigs_theme Love at First Slap

15th June 2012:
HI again! Congrats on winning my First sentence challenge by the way :)

This is a great story! I especially love the way that you described Teddy's eyes, wow! I also love this end bit ""Ted and Vickie sitting in a tree, K-I-S-S-I-N-G!"

Oh, curse you, James Sirius Potter!

We'll just cut the scene there because some language used may not be appropriate for any age."

However, the last but where you wrote that they get married etc is probably not needed but if you want to still keep it, I think that you could probably fix it up a bit because it seems very rushed.

I also really love your title and I realize now how it fits in with the story, very clever :)

potterweasleygranger/hedwigs_theme

Author's Response: Wow thank you so much! I am honored! I appreciate your input, by the way :) Thanks :)



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Review #7, by RavenclawWayToBe Love at First Slap

24th February 2012:
That story was soo good! I think you found a good combination of humor and romance in this story so that it was short, but sweet! I loved her little comments in her head like, 'I know, I hate his daft, slutty admirers too.' I actually cracked up when you put that line! And the whole thing with love at first slap was funny too! I think this was a cute one-shot!
-RavenclawWayToBe

Author's Response: Haha thank you ever so much, you don't know how much this means to me, as this one did kind of make me nervous. My all time favourite first person POV to write is the sarcastic mild humour that I associate with Victoire for some reason, so I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. Thank you so much for reviewing, I am so glad you liked it :)

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