I loved it! This was such a fun and sweet beginning and I enjoyed how you kept the boys name unknown during this first chapter! I can already tell that this is going to be a really fun story to read with a lot of funny moments going on. I loved how Albus puts things into her lunch box from time to time to surprise her and now this time he put in a live rat! Poor girl, I would have screamed too and probably done all the other stuff that she did. I can see why people would want to leave for lunch and then honestly never come back for work, they seem like some crazy people to be working with. I thought Lucy's characterization was really funny and different and i enjoyed it very much. I look forward to the next chapter and seeing what happens for the two of them when they go on their lunch together! This was a great beginning and caught my interest! Great Job!
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Awwh, poor Lucy doesn't get herself in the best of circumstances, eh? Those two guys are so adorable with their banter. Scampers.
And out the window went any futile attempt at being an individual. Haa, I adore Weasley jokes. The woes of large famous families and a million red heads.
Lool Belinda. I kind of imagine her as one of those squinty-eyed ladies who always has a shotgun behind her back, but I suppose her words can strike fear just as well.
Twenty-pocketed robes! Wizard woes, and wizard logic haa. How could anyone think that would be in fashion? I love that her robes are bright yellow. Something about Lucy just screams yellow.
Ooh but how scary Dee, er Daphne, is. I see a bit of a softie in her though. "I would do anything my godson asked, which I'm sure he mentioned." baw.
Best ending sentence ever! Totally just see Lucy skipping along the countryside like a lamb. To slaughter, perhaps...
♥ this fic's been fun so far! :D Love large casts! Hope more office banter awaits~Author's Response: No she doesn't. Lucy's a fail, but she'll get better. Maybe :P I enjoyed writing their banter a lot. Scampers is like the best word to describe them!
LOL! You knew about her shotgun? Seriously. She has one. Most people in this fic will have one. They're surrounded by woods after all. ;) Belinda is quite a painful joy.
Lucy's very yellow! Sunny lil 'Puffcake in a silly robe. It's somewhat practical. I mean you could probably fit a cauldrons worth of stuff in her robes, but still look sleek haha.
Dee's a softie for Scorpius. That's it. Be afraid!
To slaughter is about right hahaha. But she'll be ok, it's a silly story nothing too grim.
More office banter for the rest of Lucy's life mwhaha. Thanks so much for your lovely reviews :) I've enjoyed reading them and replying to them! Glad you think it's fun too.
And I forgot to mention this in the last review, but YES SHIP THEM SHIP THEM! *cough* Report Review
Ahh I love slapstick. There is so much abounding here 8D Lucy is just like WHAM everywhere, her poor body. And then hot grinning guys grinning up the space in front of her, or you know, wiggling their bums. I'm just totally imagining Lucy's face as that perpetual why meee face, with spaghetti arms flailing for effect, except cramped under a desk. She's so expressive!
Snort, and then she interrupts her joy to worry about whether he actually knows her name or not. Priorities. HE SEEMS ADORABLE, I SHALL SHIP THEM. You have to be mad to work here, extraordinarily aloof, or a Greengrass. Lucy has got that woe-is-me spot on. Office full of crazy mum-ladies.
Hee, food metaphors. what these ladies dished out was misery and if you weren't eating it too, then they would force it down your throat in heaping globs that they called "paperwork" or you've-got-to-hear-these "stories" ♥
This is such a fun start ^__^ so much silliness just from underneath a desk. And you know, it's pretty tough to tell a whole scene in one spot and describing everything around her without really seeing anything. But I got such a good scene in my head from what you described through everything else, especially all the sounds and her mental descriptions.Author's Response: Hello *waves*
Hahaha, thank you! Everything's overboard thus far, Lucy included. Yay slapstick crack fics! And yes priorities! How could Lucy go on if he crush didn't know of her existence?
That sentence (mad, aloof, or a Greengrass) will the backbone of so much more ;) Trust me, office of crazy mum-ladies doesn't begin to describe the insanity that's brewing.
:P Food = what makes the world go round. Can't not have food metaphors!
Aw, thanks. Your reviews rock! I'm glad you get the fun slapstick ridiculousness of it all, even from just underneath a desk haha. You know, I actually didn't realize that the whole first chapter was all from that vantage point until you pointed it out. Interesting on my end...
But yes, thanks for the lovely review :) I'm honored!
I love this first chapter. The way you portrayed Lucy was really funny and I enjoyed reading it a lot :) But the poor thing, hiding under a desk and being seen by her crush! Belinda seems like an interesting character, although I'm sure I know someone just like her, ha ha.
I can't wait to read more :DAuthor's Response: Hello itswonderland!
I'm glad you found Lucy to be funny and that you enjoyed the first chapter :) She's a bit much, and will continue to be. The whole cast is barmy and cracky haha.
Next chapter should be up in the next week or so! Look out for it ;) Thanks so much for the review; much appreciated!
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Haha, I really enjoyed this chapter. It just jumps right into the story and was quite hilarious. I don't read much of Lucy, but I like how you've portrayed her in this. I may have missed it, but I'm not quite sure exactly where it is that she works and I hope to find out more about that and what her job is, who she's replacing, and who her office crush is.
Grammar wise this was pretty well written. I did notice one little mistype: "The old lying codger, I thought. She wasn't a dirty old man, fine, but that didn't spot hair from sprouting above her lips or her from lying!" In the second sentence you have "spot" instead of "stop'. Other than that it looked good though.
I really hope you update soon!
xxEnigmaticEyes16Author's Response: Yay first review for the story, thank you, EnigmaticEyes! & a favourite, you are the best!
I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter :) You didn't miss anything, I didn't mention much. It's just beginning, but it will all be linear and exaplained out. I have fixed the typo, thanks for catching that, and will put the edits in once I get a nice CI :P
As far as updates, the next chapter is already complete and the third is about a quarter finished. The story writes itself because it's so ridiculous haha. Thanks again for being an awesome reader, I appreciate the response and review, etc. :)
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