This is an interesting idea... i do hope you will post more soon, so the story can continue. I didn't care much for the dialogue to be given in bold and not with the usual " " but whatever... it's still a great start! Post more soon!
LanaAuthor's Response: Thank you soo much you have no idea how much your review means to me!
I'm actually working on the next chapter as we speak. But the reason why its taking a bit long because I have stupid High School. Report Review
this sounds like a really goood story. i hope that u update soon i cant wait 2 find out what happens.
-potterhead42Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, I am so glad you liked it. That made me happy :) Report Review
Even though this chapter is the first one, it's way too short. If you're new to FF, you must know that your first chapter is the attention-grabber. You made your first chapter very unclear and short. Your summary was very good and I anticipated a decent story, but you disappointed me with your first chapter. Try editing.Author's Response: To answer you're review; I am new I am sorry if it's short. I'll try to make it longer. I'm sorry. I'm new to this forum but not generally fanfiction. Thanks for the review though. Report Review
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