This story is really good. I have to say, the first few chapters there was something in her character which really annoyed me because she did weird things way too much. I'm not against weird but no ones every action is entirely weird all the time. You have improved seriously since then and I really really liked the dressing her bit. Keep it up!Author's Response: Yeah I understand what you mean, I felt it too but it was like I didn't know how to change it? The first few chapters of a story are actually really hard to write because you have to introduce everyone and try and get their characters across while not getting boring etc etc and it's surprisingly complicated! At some point after my exams have finished I'll go back and edit it all properly so she isn't so annoying :)
Thanks by the way, I really appreciate the review and constructive criticism is always appreciated!
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hehe, i read all the authors note.
ANYWAYS. favourite line:“DOMINIQUE MARIE WEASLEY! THIS IS COMPLETELY INAPPROPRIATE AND INDECENT AND I REFUSE TO PUT ON THE SORRY EXCUSE FOR CLOTHES THAT YOU HAVE LEFT IN THIS BAG! FOR MERLIN’S SAKE I’VE USED DENTAL FLOSS BIGGER THAN THE THONG YOU PUT IN HERE!”
i loved that whole bit, and the bit with al sounding like a housewife? that was hilarious. i'm actually watching desperate housewives now. exciting!
anyway, i'll forgive you for the long wait, since it was a funny and long chapter! UPDATE SOON, AMIGO.Author's Response: Hahahaha, omgsh can't you just imagine the look on her face as she pulls it out of the bag xD
And thankyou! I will get around to updating as soon as possible but I'm gonna be really busy until my exams are over D:
I'll do my best though!
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this was an interesting chapter! it's funny that Kae was a bit clumpsy at the time that she and James were caught at sneaking at night! great chapter this one and I can't wait for the next one!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: haha thanks! I like the thought of her being really clumsy, Like she's great when she's flying but then as soon as she hits the ground she's really klutzy. A bit like me except I don't get to fly and play quidditch :( When she's drunk she's gonna be very VERY clumsy ;) Report Review
ooh, i love this! it's so funny.
my favourite line: Well yes that type, but not like that.
hehe, UPDATE SOON!Author's Response: haha I could just imagine Kae winking as she thought it and then everyone around her looking at her like she needed help...
I'll update as soon as possible but it might be about a week because I have an essay due this week and coursework and everything :(
I'll do my best!!
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this is an interesting fic so far! I like the interaction between James, Dom and Kaelyn. by the way, I noticed that you wrote Lilly instead of Lily... hope you'll update soon! can't wait to read the next chapter!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: YAY! You are my first review for this fic so I officially love you.
Thank you, I'm not sure yet if the friendship between James and Kae is coming across right yet so I'll be working on that specifically over the next few chapters
Yeah I've been writing Lilly in my other fic as well but I think it might actually be Lily, so I'll have to go back and change all of that in a while
I'll update as quickly as possibly with two fics and exams and all (not that exams stop me xD)
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