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This is absolutely beautiful. You make Luna come to life, and the relationship between her and Rolf is so believable in this, it's amazing. I love the way you make this piece so much more than just a fluffy one-shot- you make it feel so real and believable and tangible. This is probably one of the best one-shots I've read, and I do look forward to reading more of your writing!
~MAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm so happy you liked it! Rolf and Luna are such a cute couple in my head!canon and maybe I'll explore them more at some future date :) Report Review
This is lovely! So cute and just a great insight to the mind of Rolf. Some of the wording and sentence structure needs a little attention, but over all a lovely little story.Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing :) Report Review
Oh my gosh, this was absolutely adorable! I love Luna and Rolf, I think you've done a wonderful job writing about them!
When you said she came down the aisle "in a bright cheerful yellow", I actually grinned. That would be exactly what Luna would wear at her wedding.
I absolutely loved this one-shot, it was really well-done!
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for this! You put a smile on my face :) (So sorry for late reply!) Report Review
Aw, so so so cute! I love this so much. I could imagine the Luna-and-Rolf-in-the-pond scene so vividly, it was adorable. And the idea of how they met - such an unlikely creature that only appears at the most specific point in time and only Luna would be so understanding of Rolf's beliefs. Absolutely loved the way this was written, it flowed so well and the descriptions were lovely. Just adorable! :)
-MaybeAuthor's Response: Ah, I'm so glad that you got so much adorableness out of it. This one shot really is a sickly sweet and I'm glad that you loved it. Luna and Rolf are a pairing we don't see often and I'm glad you were able to enjoy my writing Report Review
As much as I love your dark, horror stories, I think you should write fluff more often. Oh my goodness, Char, my heart has swelled and is literally threatening to burst out of my chest with my love for your Rolf and Luna. This was just so, so lovely.
I love how Rolf tries to approach their relationship, how to define it - with languages and formulas, and nothing he knows can put into words them. Luna is such a unique character and I love Rolf for seeing that and you for writing it.
I think my favorite part, though, was when Rolf was watching Luna with Lorcan and Lysander, and this: to make sure she was still there, still coming for them. Which she always was; she always would be. Oh my god, my HEART. Literally bursting.
I thought it was cute that they met at a convention and they bonded over manticrocs. :)
This is seriously so sweet and full of love and I just feel really happy now to have read it. Seriously. Write more. Now.Author's Response: Hee! I'm so glad you like my fluff!! I do have a tendency to go on fluffy sprees so watch out!
Everything you said was so precious and made me smile dear. Thank you! It really brightened my day to hear that I made you happy with just this little story :) Report Review
This was such a wonderful story, just beautifully written from Rolf's POV about Luna. All the things that make up who she is, is all the love he has for her.
I liked how you said 'he stocked up on these memories' it made me smile. It sort of said that he'd remember every detail about her, and who she is, and what they've done together, all the memories, he'd remember them forever. Seriously, lovely story, definitely going into my favorites. Loved it!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! That was one of my fave parts too :) Report Review
That was such a sweet story! I really loved it.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Oh the fluff! The romance! I adore this. I sincerely hope you weren't writing this as a parody (I've heard you don't do romance except as parody) because it's absolutely beautiful. I just love it. I wish it was longer, I totally want to read a Luna/Rolf story now. So sweet. Beautifully written.Author's Response: Oh no, this is very much not a parody! The only romance I like to parody is NextGen and I've only done one of those. :) I lean more towards angst than anything else.
I'm so glad you adored this! This review totally made me smile :) :) i don't know if you've read this one already but AndrinaBlack wrote a fluffy Luna/Rolf called "Snooze" Report Review
Hello, I'm here with your VERY late review! I am so sorry for the wait! You requested in February and I still haven't responded, but here I am now, and I'll try to say as much as possible to make up for the delay.
There was really only one thing I found weird in Luna's characterization. 'She told him that she knew he loved her and why and to hell with others trying to define them.' To me, it didn't seem like Luna would say that kind of thing out loud. Like, she was so weird, and of course she knew that, but she was so beyond the point of caring that she wouldn't even mention it. Luna is a lot more carefree and airy, so she wouldn't mention something like that. It almost makes it sound like she was purposely stepping outside the box when we know it's just her character, and in the end makes her sound like one of those teenagers that tries hard to be unique.
Now, don't get me wrong, this is an AMAZING story. You really did characterize Luna well, despite my ramble up there. I like when you talked about her hitching up her skirts, that was definitely a Luna thing. And I love how you portrayed her husband, even though we know Luna is weird, we get to see that there's some normal in the relationship (because you know, everyone assumes that together they're a bunch of nutbags so it's nice to see some normalcy). I adored the first paragraph! Very sweet, very charming, this whole thing was very light and cute and I loved it. What I admire the most about this is your ability to say so much in so few words. If you read my fics, I'm always coming up with four thousand word chapters and huge paragraphs that make my readers' eyes hurt. It's amazing that you can give so much in so little.
Anyway, this is definitely going to my favorites. Author's Response: Thanks for coming by! I'm sorry for my own delay in responding to this review!
On Luna, I'd like to think that after some years she would have matured a bit, the world having gotten to her a little bit but not altered her in anyway. I do see your point on this making her seem like she was acting that way on purpose rather than just because she was that way. I'll see if I'll change anything on that in any future edits.
Thank you fir your compliments on me being able to say so much in few words :) I'm always worrying about word count because I tend to think I don't have enough to say. This tells you how well I do on NaNoWriMo (as in not).
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This was such a cute and sweet story. I loved how you wrote Rolf most of all. When you see Luna Lovegood stories you sometimes see the writers writing Luna in her point of view but it was such a delight to see her written from someone else's review!
I adored how you described their relationship with each other. This line completely won me over :)
When she cried he was there to wipe her tears, to bring a smile back to her face. When she laughed it was his arms that caught her and spun her around in delight, reveling in her light frame against him. He was the man who stood at the end of the aisle as she walked towards him, dressed not in the traditional white, but in a bright cheerful yellow. He made her tingle and ache with his hands and lips.
Eee. So good! 10/10. :) And going to my favorite since this is actually my first Rolf/Luna story that I have ever read and I just LOVED it.Author's Response: I am so happy that I was able to be your first Rolf/Luna story and that you liked it! :) Rolf was really fun to write and his voice just kind of came out that way. Again, it makes me happy to read you liked this because it was such fluffy goodness. Report Review
This was so nice! I've always been kind of fascinated with Rolf/Luna because so much could be done with them. I think you've written Rolf really well, I always pictured him as this fairly normal and grounded person who contrasted but complemented Luna's more cooky personality and I feel that's sort of the direction you took with him.
Also the moments you show between the two of them flowed really well, especially how Luna is with the twins. Your description was great and your story had a really good structure and flow.
This was a great little one shot. Your characterisation was lovely and I really enjoyed it!Author's Response: Yeah, that's how I've pictured Rolf too! Luna needs someone to bring her back down to the ground once in a while :) I'm glad you thought this was lovely and great and it makes me all happy inside to hear that! Report Review
I've been meaning to read this particular one-shot of yours for ages - and darn it, it was so sweet! You wrote Rolf quite well and realistically, which is good since we read so little about him. I loved Luna in this, very.. well, Luna! You are turning out to be a fantastic author, and I really enjoyed reading this one-shot, so keep up the good work!Author's Response: Oh wow! I'm flattered you were looking at this! I'm so happy that you liked my Luna and Rolf. They were so much fun to write! Report Review
This is a very cute and well written piece. You managed to write something fluffy, but still have it be touching--a great Valentine's Day one-shot.
I love how you manage to tell Luna and Rolf's story in just a few thousand words. I feel like you were very efficient in your use of language in order to tell of their life with children, and their first encounter.
I think you picked the perfect way to tell this story--in moments. These little flashes, or memories are often how we remember our loved ones. And they all seem to be moments of pure happiness and joy in life.
I think the last line really sums up the moments in the rest of the story, and explain why Rolf is so happy to simply watch his wife.
I honestly don't have much critique for this piece. Great job, and I really enjoyed reading it :)Author's Response: Hi! I was trying to drown people in fluff and it seems that it worked pretty well.
To be honest, I was worried about the flashes of memories because it would be disjointed so to hear that it was the "perfect way" makes me feel so squishy inside! :)
Gah! This was such a nice review! Thank you!! Report Review
This is one of the cutest things I have ever read!
I love the Luna/Rolf pairing because you can do so much with it! It's adorable how you've written it so mystically and just really in Luna style.
The setting is just one of peace and tranquility which makes it come off as a really lovely fluffy, light read! I'd love to see you write more of this.
I actually can't put into words how much I do love this! It's a beautiful piece!Author's Response: I adored writing this because it was so cute and fluffy and sweet so I'm glad you liked it to! I hadn't thought to write Luna and Rolf before reading, of all things, a Draco/Luna! :)
It's tough as an angst writer, but I do want to do more fluffy! :)
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Ooo! I loved this. I've never really been one for Luna/Rolf (being a diehard Neville/Luna shipper) but you really sold their relationship here for me. I just utterly adored this. You may have even made me consider them as a shipping.
The imagery in this story was beautiful!!!
JazAuthor's Response: :) Thank you!! It's always fun to hear that I've been able to expand someone's thoughts in different directions! :) I haven't read much Neville/Luna myself so perhaps I can go get myself sold on them :) Thank you for this!
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This is story is amazing! I feel like Rolf, not sure how to describe my love for this story ;) Everything about it is sweet, beautiful, and perfect. Really.
I love Rolf's character. He seems like a great fit for Luna. THe way they met is just brilliant. I can't think of a better way for Luna to meet her match!
When I saw this the first thing I thought was "ugh, a Luna story." Nobody ever seems to write her right. She's completely insane (ever weirder than in the books) or become just another regular person, which is really no fun. You are the first I've read to make her believable (granted, I don't read a lot of Luna, but that doesn't make it any less incredible). You've had her mature without losing the way she was.
Seeing it all through Rolf's eyes just made it a thousand times better because he has his own way of seeing her. He doesn't see her as weird or odd, but as his wonderful wife.Author's Response: *HUGS*
Thank you! I had fun writing Rolf and liked to think that Rolf and Luna complement each other, him with his somewhat sensibleness and her and her wide-eyed wonder. It makes me all happy to hear that I've managed to stay true to Luna as possible. She's a very hard character to write because, like you said, it's easy to lose her.
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N'aww this was so cute! :3 I loved how you built up the picture of Rolf, showed him trying to describe how they were in love, using rational methods of measurement and description; the suggestion was that they were irrational and completely perfect, and I adored that. The way that Rolf was always saying how much he was in awe of Luna was the cutest thing! I loved it so much :)
I also loved how you described Luna and Rolf's relationship in general; how he would watch her and help her, and they would do the unconventional together. I loved your theory of how they met! It was such a Luna thing, and it was so gorgeous. I absolutely adored this all over :3 10/10!
~TGKAuthor's Response: Thank you! Though all we have as "canon" to go off of for Rolf and Luna is that they're both some sort of naturalists, I felt that with the academic background, he'd be more of the school-y type guy. But being married to Luna, one can't be too mired in semantics, eh?
Wow, thank you so much on all the lovely words you wrote! I'm going to be going to sleep with a smile! Report Review
Oh gosh! This was the sweetest thing ever! I really really loved this! It made me all warm and fuzzy inside ♥
You did such an amazing job with your characters! Rolf is just like I imagined him. So academic, but still not blinded by the facts. He's a curious nature and wants to find the truth behind it all. And Luna! She seems so full of life, like she was in the books. I think she was really true to her character! I absolutely loved the idea of her in a yellow wedding dress!
And the love they share! *happy sigh* You described it so beautifully and made it feel so real. This was just so well written and captivating. I feel like Rolf, I don't even have the words to describe how wonderful this is. You just managed to fit so much details and feelings in this that I'm in awe.
This was just perfect!
~EleniaAuthor's Response: Hi!!! Yay, you get to review one of my stories! :)
How funny! You're the second person to point out how academic Rolf is. I hadn't thought I was writing him that way but I guess I did and it worked out brilliantly! I must say, I'm smarter than I think (lol, sorry, having a pompous moment there).
Thank you for this :) I definitely tried to make it uber-gushy and cute and you have assured me that I did! :) Yay!
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Hey! Here from review swap :)
This was really sweet. I think you did a great job of characterizing both Luna and Rolf. Rolf is a perfect academic, trying to use the words he knows to describe something that isn't scientific or sensible in the least, and Luna is delightful in her casual dismissal of his need to fit in with everyone else. Also, you're the second person I've seen who has put Luna in a yellow wedding dress. Is that canon and I just missed it? Either way, it's quite fitting, or so I think. Very Luna.
I also really loved your description of Rolf's many mental photographs. You breathed life into so many happy moments in their marriage and in their lives as mother and father to their children, and I could clearly see his affection for her as he watched her toy with her own curiosity and explore it all.
I think the way you described their meeting was perfectly in character, too. It's sweet to imagine him blabbering on and then stopping to find that not only was she listening, but also that she had an opinion of her own to add to the conversation. It's like he was really able to see past her dreamy, carefree nature into the intelligent Ravenclaw that dwells inside her.
Great job! Thoroughly enjoyable and well written :)
AmandaAuthor's Response: I hope you get a cavity from how sweet you thought this was! :)
I wasn't even meaning to make him academic, academica (hee hee, couldn't help it) but now that I look at it, I guess I did!
I think Luna and her dad wore yellow to Bill and Fleur's wedding and said something about it. I can't remember exactly...or maybe it was just her dad who wore yellow... It is Luna though, isn't it?
I truly tried my best to make those little moments come alive and I'm so happy to hear that it came alive. I think of Rolf as this big burly man who blabbers on sometimes and needs Luna, funnily enough, to bring him back to earth. :)
Thank you for this awesome review!
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So i had a good review written up, then suddenly the site went down for the two seconds I wanted to submit it. made me very upset. anyways, let me start this, right?
This is a brilliant story. I'm not into fluff or one-shot, but you really got my attention with this. There aren't many Luna/Rolf stories out there and you killed it. Not in a bad way, of course!
To say the least, you pulled off the fluff very well. I hate to say that I'm not into fluff, but if I were, this would be a great choice for me. I think something you could've touched more on was some more dialogue, since you had little to none. That could've added to the fluff some more.
Another one of your concerns was Luna. I think she'll always be a child at heart and you touched her so well. I was always wondering if Luna would ever grow up and outgrow her odd antics, but you did a very good job at making sure she was still the Luna that everyone loved. It's hard to highlight that when you're just doing a one-shot, but it was brilliant nonetheless. She seems amazing with her children :D.
So, like I said, I'm not a fluff or one-shot person, but you did both really well. You might turn me to the dark side soon enough ;).Author's Response: Oh noes :( That's always crappy when it does that.
Ha! You liked my fluff! I'm happy even though it isn't exactly your cup of tea. killed it - loved that phrase! I know it doesn't mean it in a bad way but the slang is...I don't know, I just liked it.
I know I could've put dialogue in there but I'm not a dialogue sort of person. I think if you read my other one-shots (which is fine if you don't because I know you're not into that sort of length) then you'll see that I basically use no dialogue in most of them :P I don't know why - too focused on description?
I'm glad that I kept to Luna. I wanted to have the child-like Luna but the grown up Luna there too! Thanks!
You mean I might turn you to the fluff-side? ;P
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This is great! A perfect description of Luna and Rolf, I think. I really enjoyed reading it. Your writing is very descriptive and engaging, I couldn't find any problems with it at all.
I especially liked how Luna wore yellow on her wedding day, it's just so like her and fits perfectly with her character.
Great work! =)Author's Response: Thank you so much for this! I feel very grateful that you find my work descriptive and engaging!
I absolutely HAD to have Luna in yellow for her wedding day! XD It couldn't have been any other way :)
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Aww! Such a sweet little one-shot. I love Luna/Rolf stories, there seem to be so few. I just couldn't help but smile while reading this, especially when reading about chasing the twins in the garden. Just so cute! :D
Sam.Author's Response: I totally couldn't find any Luna/Rolf stories! I mean, I think I found one, so I just HAD to write one myself! I'm glad you found it cute and thank you for your review!
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Oh this was such a sweet one shot about their love for each other and how hard it is to just place words for it! I love the little looks we got into their lives such as when and how they met, her chasing after the boys, ect. I absolutely loved this story as it was just so sweet and cute and wonderful and all the other words that mean the same thing. The flow was so well done as well, I just floated along from paragraph to paragraph with no pause or anything. Great Job!
~Slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Thank you! Not only did I want to convey in general words how Rolf loved Luna but also make it real to the reader the moments that make up and define that love! So to hear/read what you just wrote just pleases me like a small turtle with a strawberry treat!
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Awww that was so unbelievably cute ♥ Rolf is such a sweetie and everything he said to try and describe Luna was so romantic. There were so many beautiful lines, but I've come to expect this from you so that's no surprise at all.
My favourite lines:
She was the air he breathed, the sun whose warmth he basked in. From the fine hair as silver as the celestial body she was named after to her unique mind that was willing to explore possibilities and see what most wouldn't see; she was beautiful through and through.
Snapped a mental picture and filed it away in a spot of his mind that was filled with lightness and love.
But he never looked away, not once, and he hadn't been able to tear his gaze away from her since.
Just so beautiful and fluffy! And I loved the whole bit when they're in the pond, but that's too long to quote. You give them such character and life and it was so cute! Happy Valentine's Day to you too :D
MarinaAuthor's Response: Thanks, Marina! All your very kind words have set a warm glow in the center of my writer's soul :) I very much admire your own work so I know that these words are very sincere!
I wanted to make anyone who read this appreciate the fluff that is known as Luna and Rolf because in my mind, there can be no room for sadness and angst with someone who would marry Luna Lovegood! :) Thank you! Report Review
Aww, this is so completely adorable. I loved it from the first sentence. It was so cool seeing Luna through Rolf's eyes. He didn't see her as peculiar like every one else, but her saw her as Luna, a beautiful, innocent girl who was so easy for him to love.
I love that Rolf tried, unsuccessfully I might add to quantify his love and try to explain it. But love just is, sometimes there is no way to explain it and he seemed to know this.
Luna was really well characterised. I loved the little moments when she was chasing the boys, and when she was in the lake. Can I just add...super adorably cute *squee*
The ending, especially the last line, was amazing. It really summed up their love and relationship. Love just happened for them, they just fell inexplicably in love :)
Awesome story. You are such a talented writer and I love the imagery and use of metaphor that you always weave in. It makes every story so enjoyable to read.Author's Response: Thank you! I took on Rolf's POV because Luna seems too unique to try to even attempt to share headspace with :)
Yay for loving Rolf and Luna! I had SO much fun writing the little scenes between Luna, Rolf and the boys so I shall join you in Squeeing!
I'm so glad you loved it! I definitely went for making this just plain fluffy beautiful love-stuff and it makes me happy to hear that you enjoyed it! Report Review
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