I love how the flow of this is like a memory. It's kind of the way I think this character might go back and relive these moments over and over as she moves through her life. I like how she references the illusions she had about the space around her and how she sees things differently, now that she has had this experience.
This was a lovely read!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I like to try new things with my writings, and I'm glad you liked the style of this! It's different than I normally write, so I wasn't sure if I could pull it off right. I'm glad that you picked up on what I was going for! *relief* haha
Thanks again :)
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awhh poor girl. she should fight fro him!!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! And I know it's sad :/ She just really wants him to be happy, and she thinks he'll be happier with someone else.
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Thats so sad but beautiful! Why would she give up that easy!! He would be so much better with her!!!
Okay so she did the right thing but still, I want him to pick her and make her world stay colourful! But love sucks and we all move on I guess! :}
I loved this one-shot! I also loved the way you didn't use her name at all in the story or even the other girls name just James'.
Anyway a great story! :D
~BlameItOnTheNarglesAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this piece, and I put a lot of thought into it, so I'm glad you liked it :) I know it's sad, but she loves him so much that she just wants him to be happy, even if it's not with her.
I don't know why, but I love leaving characters nameless. It adds mystery. I might write another one shot in the future from James' perspective, so I may end up deciding on a name. But for now I like her nameless, and I'm glad you do too!
Thanks so much for the review, it made me smile :) Report Review
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