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Review #1, by NaidatheRavenclaw Purgatory

18th March 2012:
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I haven't read a lot of Founders era pieces, so I don't really have much to compare this to, but I found it gorgeous. It really made sense, that Rowena would keep Helena locked up like this. The last sentence made that point really prominent. Rowena, though she is the Founder of my own House, has always striken me as the kind of women who will get her way and who stays true to her word. You really portrayed that here, as well as the differences between Rowena and Helena. Lovely job.

My one small piece of constructive crit is that the time period wasn't really there for me. The language and such that you used was fairly modern (though you did manage to stay away from super modern expressions, so good job with that!) However, as this piece was more about the emotion, I think the language didn't do anything much, if at all, to detract from that :)

Great job!

-Naida

Author's Response: I never really read a lot of founders story before this easier which was why it was so fun (and hard) to write. Thank you so much! I portrayed the relationship between Rowena&Helena the way i thought it would be.

Yeah, I think I'm going to get a beta for this story. I haven't read any period drama stories in a while so my language defiantly isn't there. I did try.

Thank you for this amazing review!
Jaz


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Review #2, by kestral14 Purgatory

21st February 2012:
Wow, good story, interesting idea :)

Author's Response: Thank you!
Jaz


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Review #3, by hp481516 Purgatory

20th February 2012:
Great job! I have always been interested in the Ravenclaw family and I loved your take on Helena and Rowena's relationship. I really liked the addition of Thomas in the story.

Author's Response: Thank you! I've had a small fascination with the founders in general (because we hear so little about them) Thanks! I had the include some romance angst and Thomas was just that! haha
Jaz


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Review #4, by charlottetrips Purgatory

14th February 2012:
Great moment to tackle and you've done it rather well.

you do not [] what it feels like to loose someone you love! - missing [know]?

I was a bit confused with the ending. Helena's already a ghost? Immediately after her death? Or did Rowena's spell do that?

And Lucifer Tate! Is that really his name? I was thinking when I was reading this "Where is the Bloody Baron" and then I realized that he wasn't the "Bloody Baron" until after he killed Helena and died. Also, how'd you come up with Lucifer?

The only thing I could ask of you is to WRITE MORE! With what you wrote here, it did flow and I was drawn into the story, into Helena's rebelliousness and Rowena's anger. I would've wanted to know more about Thomas but from the snippets you wrote, I did get a good idea of the young love Helena was wrapped up in.

xChar

Author's Response: Thank you!
Yeah, I think I'm going to go back through this story with a fine edged comb and edit it (especially the ending) because people are really confused by it :/
Thank you for such an amazing review!!
Jaz


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Review #5, by Dramionie_Child Purgatory

9th February 2012:
Aww :( Poor Helena! I wish she got to see the world but I completely understand Rowena's edginess about her leaving. Who is this Thomas bloke? I would like to know more:)

Beautifully written, and I really enjoyed it!

Emily x/ Hedwigs-Hat xx

Author's Response: Hi!
Yeah I'm going to edit this story later on this week and maybe add flashbacks or something because a lot of people are intrigued my Thomas (truth be told, I am too haha)
Thank you!
Jaz, x


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