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Review #1, by Moonyxluna Chimes of Regret

20th February 2012:
Hufflepuff review tag (:
This was a really great read! Usually it's Rose who's pinning after Scorpius, so it was nice to read it from the other perspective. I really liked all of the detail and emotion you put into this, it was very lovely.

I really liked the part about them becoming potions partners, as well as the part about their hands brushing up against eachother after they got caught in the restricted section. Great work on this!!

Author's Response: Hey :D Thanks for stopping by !

Thank you for the compliment. I'm really glad that you enjoyed the story. I also like those part you mentioned :D
This is still far from perfect but I'll keep improving myself.

Thanks again for stopping by.. see you in the common room... or in my next story (if I ever get it done =_=).. or in your story :D

:D :D :D


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Review #2, by atellam Chimes of Regret

11th February 2012:
+ seemed to just didn't care
- This part doesn't make any sense...

+ met at the three broomstick.
- Should be: met at the Three Broomsticks. (plural and capitalised)

+ was surrounded by too many cheery and loud bunch of the Weasley-Potter kids.
- This doesn't actually make sense the way you've written it. It would be better as: Was surrounded by too many of the cheery and loud Weasley-Potter kids.

There are other things I could point out, but mainly it's 's'. There should be plurals but you don't put the 's' there and it makes no sense. I'd re-read over this and have a look for other errors, or you could get a beta.

I found the way you incorporated the song lyrics into this interesting, as it's rather different from a lot of the other Song fics/One-shots i've read and the fact that your translated the song is really unique :)

Scorpius is brilliant in this and I really like his characterisation. He wasn't sappy (which is seriously out of character for him, yet so many people seem to write him that way regardless -_-) but wasn't all, 'I am a man and have the same emotions as a brick' either, which was lovely.

Pacing and flow were fine in this, and while I wouldn't worry too much about it, if you are looking over this to correct the spelling bits I pointed out above, i'd take a look at your transition scenes. I feel they could be worked on a bit. But, as I said, they aren't anything to stress about. ^_^

Anyway, all in all, I really, really liked this and hope that what i've said is helpful,
- Adele :)

Author's Response: Super! Thank you for pointing those mistakes. I know they are there .. somewhere.. somehow...

I'll work on it... and I think it's a good idea to get a beta.

I love the song and I had a really great fun translating it :D (and the idea of making it into a story just sort of flowed in).
I'm also glad you like Scorpius's character, and the story in general.

About the transition scene, in which way should I work it on? I know you said it's nothing to stress about, but still it would be really good to know :D

Yes, thank you. Your review is really helpful.


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Review #3, by CloakAuror9 Chimes of Regret

11th February 2012:
Hello there! Super sorry for taking quiet some time getting this review across...but better late than never right?

I love this story! Everything is just placed in the right place. Plus you described everything so well. Particularly, Scorpius' feelings towards Rose. I like the way that you didn't make him so uber-mushy, he's just a perfect Scorpius with his own flaws.

I think the story is very believable because it just is. And I'm really glad you just got straight to the point about Scorpius' feelings and not put us through all those chapter after chapter 'discover-his-feelings-for-Rose' kind of thing because quiet frankly as good and lovely they are, it gets boring. Very boring. So for me to read about Scorpius with sure feelings about Rose is just a big 'BAM!' thing for me. Okay...totally off the track. Moving on,

The plot of the story is interesting and unique. I have a feeling that this won't be as cliched as I might expect. Mhm. I sense great things from this story! (Yes, I am predicting things...I'm a secret Seer. Sshhh!)

All in all, I think this is a very interesting story! (How many times have I said that?!) And I would just love to see more of it. 10/10

Fantastic writing,
CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: Hello there too :D Thank you so much for your review :D :D :D

I'm actually quite surprised (in a good way) that you think the plot is interesting and unique ( >< so happy right now). and I'm really happy to hear that you would love to see more of this. For the moment I plan this to just be a one shot song fic... but hey.. maybe... I'll make a continuation of this in the future... I'll be sure to let you know if I do :D

Once again thank you for the review :D :D I'm happy that you enjoyed it :D :D :D


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Review #4, by apocalypse Chimes of Regret

10th February 2012:
Hey! This is apocalypse, here with your review!

First of all I'd like mention that this is one of the sweetest stories I've read so far. =) The plot itself is very light and soft; I enjoyed it thoroughly. Even though you've chosen one of the most commonly used pairings I really liked the way you portrayed their relationship. It wasn't the usual; Malfoy/ Rose hating each other, getting into fights and then eventually ending up falling in love. I liked this different approach to their relationship. Good job! =)

My favorite parts: first, the library scene. It was cute and funny at the same time! And the second: 'Scorpius could feel their robes brushing each others. Then suddenly, their hands touched.'

Towards the areas of concern, shall we?

Characterization: Malfoy's characterization was much defined; I loved how you worked really hard to make sure that you did justice to all his feelings and emotions. Usually one expects to see the ultimate Slytherin and typical Malfoy qualities in him. But you sure did a good job in conveying the fact that sometimes it's more than just the inherited qualities. You chose to write the other side of Malfoy, which I might as well mention, I enjoyed reading a lot. =)

Rose: Her character was also quite interesting. I could see her more like Hermione's daughter rather than a Weasley. I personally liked her. I loved the way you described her from Malfoy's POV. No wonder he fell for her. =) She really does sound attractive and lovely! =P

Flow: The paragraphs were very well organized. The transitions between the memories/scenarios were very smooth. I was able to keep track of everything and did not lose my reading flow even once. Good job there!

That's it from me for now. You've got potential in you! Just need a bit of polishing and you'll do super great in future. =) I hope you like this review and feel free to come back any time! Until your next story, Good Luck and Happy Writing!

Author's Response: My first review ever!! Thank you thank you thank you. I love your review... I'm currently grinning from ear to ear :D.

I'm glad you consider this as a different approach of their relationship. I was actually a bit worried since, as you said, they are one of the most common pairing.

and I'm so happy that you have a favorite part(s) :'D I like those scenes too

About the characterization, I'm glad that you think I do quite justice to both of them. I was worried because first, I didn't describe much (especially for Scorpius, since its his pov)... and second, I didn't put Slytherin/Malfoy characteristic into Scorpius. I actually prepared a part which showed a little bit of that (but decided not too, since I thought it would dragged the story)... and now I am glad to know that it doesn't matter much.

All in all, I'm really happy that you enjoyed this story. It was my first after soo long. One more thing is, your review really boost my mood. I will keep working on my writing.

Thank youuu


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