Hey there. Thanks for joining my challenge! I'm very happy I had the chance of reading your thoughts on this matter. I really enjoyed it.
Whew...this was really emotional for me. It addressed two major conflicting feelings I have for Snape: the loving, warm feeling because he was courageous and persisting, that he protected regardless of his reasons and the more spiteful feeling that he could have done other things so much better. He didn't have to treat all those children so bad. He didn't have to take every opportunity he had to make Harry feel like nothing, to insult his father. I can understand why he wasn't capable of being kinder but I still can't help but feel that he was too unfair and unjust with a lot of people for no real reason.
What I enjoyed best about your story is George's turn of feelings at the end. It really felt like closure to him, being finally able to think differently about Snape's actions. He really needed that. he needed to forgive Snape in order to go on with his life. One of my favourite scenes was the one where Fred II thanks "Mr Snape" for helping the others during the war. That was an achingly beautiful moment to imagine and it just captured the essence of the story: forgiveness. Kudos for such a great story! Report Review
This is a really sweet story.
You say one of your concerns in this story was whether George's feeling's were believable or not? You needn't have worried. It is one of the most touching pieces I have ever read.
Most people portray George as being a very angry individual after Fred's death and you've shown here that he is quite angry however he has a reason to be due to Snape's separate memorial. It was nice how you added that it to show George wasn't being completely irrational which really enhanced the angst in this.
George crying... awwh. I love the way that he needs to show his emotions and you really do show his grief really well in this mainly because he deals with it quite inwardly around his family but then when he's on his own he shows it outwardly which is mainly how a man does deal with grief.
The whole taking it into the future ten years is a nice touch. It shows that George will have naturally grown up over the past ten years, he will have had children and seen things in a different light. I like the fact that he now realises that Snape wasn't someone who could just be dismissed after his death but that he dedicated seventeen years of his life to a double life.
Little Freddie is adorable too! Can you write more of him... Please *puppy dog face :P*
10/10Author's Response: My apologies for the rate response on this; RL has been getting in the way far too much for my liking as of late.
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and I'm thrilled to hear my characterization of George worked. I really was worried about that for the simple fact that I hadn't written either of the twins as a main character before, nor had I had much practice with angst at the time. I was mixing two new things so I was so afraid it'd be a complete train wreck - so glad to know it wasn't!
Ah, little Freddie. After this, I've grown to love him, too. However, I must admit that next-gen isn't really my cup of tea. But, your request for him has actually sparked a little idea for a mini-story. Perhaps it will evolve into something... :)
Oh this was just beautiful! I think you captured the feelings George would be having so perfectly, I thoroughlly enjoyed this! Ilove how descriptive your writing is, and this flowed absolutly perfectly. You brought out a very beautiful emotion of George's, and wrote it so well.
I had the same feeling about Snape when I first read DH; "wait, so... I shouldn't hate him? *five seconds later* He's a hero!!". So I loved how you put that in perspective of George, and his (at first) refusal to accept Snape as a hero.
Oh and little Freddie! God he was just the most adorable thing. I'm not really the best judge when it comes to kids, but I think you captured the 'innocence of a child' so perfectly. I got all teary-eyed when he said "Thank you Mr. Snape."
Brilliant job! This was an amazing read, thanks for the swap!Author's Response: That's EXACTLY how I reacted, too! It's actually what triggered the idea for this story; it seems like many fans changed their opinions about Snape in an instant and forgot all of his faults. Don't get me wrong - I adore Snape as a character, but he'll never be an angel to me. :p
Also, I'm super glad to hear Fred II worked in this story. I, too, often find it difficult to write the little ones, so I was worried about him.
Thanks so much for the lovely review! :) Report Review
George just broke my heart. Screaming at Snape (I mean, the memorial) and then thanking him. I Think you really grasped all of the right feelings with this. I can definitely picture this being the way Gorge behaves.Author's Response: Thanks a million for the lovely review! I don't usually like to break people's hearts, but as that was the intention of this particular story, it's good to hear that I succeeded. :) Report Review
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