What an awesome story! I can't WAIT for more! Emma's already so loveable, despite it only being the first chapter. I especially love how despite life dealing her a bad hand- her sister, her job, her FURNITURE, (Bad things always come in spurts...) she rolled out of the bed next day and felt happy to be alive- she's awesome!
And James... I like him as a band player, I think. I could really imagine a british accent on him, for some reason. I can't wait for him to get to know Emma! Brilliant start, I have a feeling this is already one of my favourites, and it's only the first chapter!
p.s. I really like the chapter length. Longer= more to read, more to happen!Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^ AND I TOTALLY AGRREE. Bad things always come in massive groups. I've failed a test, gotten dumped & got into a fight with my friends in the same day before. -_- Those days are so crappy! But Emma's an optimist! Bad things happen to make way for good things. :3
I wish I was more like her...hehe.
James is so attractive that I really wonder if I'm only writing him to please my own inner wantings of casting all attractive guys. Cough. He's so arrogant and lazy and silly. I can't wait to develop him & Emma's relationship & personalities even more. I'm so excited!!
Thanks for the feedback on chapter length! I doubt the other chapters will be 7k, though. Might be around 4-5k at max. :3
& Thank you for taking the time to leave a review! It's made me very happy on this rainy, paper-writing day/week before finals! ^_^ ♥ Report Review
like like like! please hurry and put up a new chapter. I'm glad that your chapters are long.Author's Response: I'm glad you like the first chapter! :) I'm working on chapter 2, but it's not ready to be put into the queue yet. Thank you for taking the time to leave a review! Means a lot to me ^_^ ♥ Report Review
Good stuff so far! I really like emma's personality-it's not obnoxious but still unique to her! I can't wait to see James and her get to know each other better :)Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! I don't want to turn her into a Mary-Sue just because she's kind of passive-aggressive/a push-over and nice. :/
JAMES IS A;KHERA. That's all I have to say. ;) I'm excited for this story! So this feedback just really get me motivated. Thank you so much for taking the time to write this review. ^_^ ♥ Report Review
HOW IS THIS CHAPTER 7K???
It honestly feels like so much less and was such an easy, breezy read. I think its because Emma is so likable and the promise of the hot lead singer kind of pulls you forward like, come on, you know she's going to see him again, but when?
ugh, Amy still makes me so mad ughhh, I wonder exactly what she did this time to make it so that she had to leave and take everything with her?
And James. James sounds... hot. Like, just as hot as JGS. Good work girl! Also, for the record, I imagined the drummer as the drummer from Flower Boy Band and if you could include him more that would be lovely could you also do an insert of me and then he and i get married and do all of the things that are wonderful and not to be detailed in this review?
ANYWAY. You know how much i love this idea. I can't wait until we meet Albus. I hope he has the same lovely hair as KJW, but I know you'll put your own great spin on his character, just like you've done with everything else.
LOVELY DARLING, JUST WHAT I ANTICIPATED!
MOAR.Author's Response: I KNOW RIGHT, ANNIE? I DON'T EVEN. IT JUST SORT OF WENT AND BECAME 7K BY ITSELF.
He. You silly girl. ♥ James is smirking. SMIRKING and this is only the first chapter. HOW MUCH MORE SMIRKING CAN WE HANDLE? Apparently, a lot, because I love the fact that he's infuriatingly hot and just annoying and lazy and all those things. :) But you already know this ~* hehe.
AMY. GOD. We're going to get more of her. Obviously, she can't leave her little sis in piece. Drama everywhere ~*~* which is good for reading but not good for poor Emma. Why do I always put my OCs through the grinder? ;)
JGS. JGS. JGS. OMG. I CAN'T EVEN. WHERE?? You fooled me. I thought you were pointing to him or something and I just...need him in my life. LOLOL. I don't make sense but I'm hungry so it makes sense ?
HAHAHA. DUDE. I IMAGINED THE DRUMMER FROM FLOWER BOY BAND, TOOO. THINGS WLL HAPPEN ~* ! fanservice for annie ~* ;) HAHA
Thank you so much, Annie! THIS REVIEW HAS MADE ME REALLY EXCITED TO KEEP WRITING THIS STORY. WHE. Hot Albus & Hot James & Hot Xavier and bad sister + two ridiculously silly friends = dramadramadramaconflict!humor
You are a superstaaar. I LOFF YOUU.
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Oh my goodness! I absolutely love this. I mean, really. Absolutely. I'm already fangirling and desperately wanting another wonderfully written chapter. (Le subtle hint.) I adore Emma and all of her innocent, cute, 'Puff quirkiness, as well as Xavier (eh, some fluff there, maybe?), Nat and Liv (so silly, but utterly wonderful), and James (we're only one chapter in and he's already smirking). Seriously, this was such a lovely start to a story, and I'll be waiting with bated breath for the next chapter. Fantastic job!
- EmmaAuthor's Response: James! He's always smirking. So infuriating, right? But so attractive at the same time ~* awhoo. What will we do? :)
Emma is so puff it's ridiculous. Like, you don't get more puff than her ;) and in a different way than (hopefully) most puffs are written. There is going to be a lot of confusion and drama with Xavier, Nat and Liv & smirking James running around, hm? :)
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This is fantastic so far! It's a really solid start to a story that has real promise. Very interesting, original idea that I can't wait to see develop! Please update soon :)Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying the ridiculousness of it so far. :P It means a lot to have your support for the first chapter. Thanks for taking the time to review! ^_^
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Ohhh I like this story! It is different from the rest of fanfiction!Author's Response: Thank you! :D Means a lot. ^_^ ♥ Report Review
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