Oooh, great first chapter! You really managed to capture a lot of vivid emotion in the span of just a few hundred words. I really enjoyed the way you just jumped into the moment without any back story. I'm sure that information will come, but these two moment in time are really captivating.
I can totally relate to the conflicted feelings Hermione is experiencing. Even without knowing what brought her to this moment, I remember what love and sex and relationships were like at that age: confusing and all-consuming. The uncertainty, the feeling of isolation in the middle of a crowded hallway... And the line, "The feeling of not knowing was overwhelming..." So true! Sometimes the anxiety of what may happen is the worst of all!
Anyway, I just randomly stumbled across your story and wanted to take a quick second to tell you I think it's off to a great start. Good luck with the next chapter! Report Review
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