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Review #1, by PhoenixStone Above all else

20th February 2012:
I liked this story a lot. My criticism would be that sometimes it seemed like there was he/she confusion that made me confused as to whether Dominique was a girl or boy (I think once or twice at the beginning and once towards the end, I can't remember exactly where thought, sorry), but otherwise it was really good. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing :D

Aha I have fixed the issue and it has been resubmitted into the queue - thank you for pointing it out :D

Rach xx


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Review #2, by Manga_girl Above all else

15th February 2012:
Hi! Here I am for your challenge review!!

First of all, I'm going to say I found this very entertaining and darn good. You write it all beautifully! I have to say I haven't read much femmeslash and have only read one before but I really liked this. The language and description was great!

Emma x

Author's Response: Hey there!

Thank you so much! I was worried that you might not like the femmeslash but I felt it was something I needed to write. I'm so happy you enjoyed the fic and I had quite good fun writing it :D

Thank you for dropping by and reviewing this and for making the challenge which inspired me :)

Rach xxx


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Review #3, by GracelesslyFalling Above all else

14th February 2012:
hey there!
So i thought this was really beautiful, because I don't really read slash or even femslash, but I thought it was written kinda perfectly.
| especially love how dom came to realise she liked meghan too!

It was very well written! Wonderful job!

-izzy xoxo

Author's Response: FYI: You have just put a huge grin on my face! :D I look like such a goof right now! :P

I didn't do slash, but one of my closest friends has just come out and I wrote this thinking of her :)

AH Thank you so much!! :D

Rach xxx


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Review #4, by Loony_Scorpy Above all else

9th February 2012:
This was so freaking sweet! At the end mostly anyway :P I actually really loved this and how it progressed. And this review is sucky because it's so short.. sorry!! So yeah, I loved it ♥ It's the best femmeslash I've read :)

Author's Response: You are too kind to me! You review all my fics and everytime I see your name I get a huge smile on my face!! :D

Thank you so much for this amazing review! It means so much to me that its the best you've read :')

Ah!!

THANK YOU!

Rach xx


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Review #5, by WitnesstoitAll Above all else

5th February 2012:
To be honest, I've not read many femslashes before, but this was a pretty good story. I think you did a good job of setting up the unrequitted love vantage on Meghan's side of things and Dom's vantage of not wanting to be judged, etc etc. I do think that there were a few things that could be tightened up to make this oneshot a bit more effective. The first time you mention the houseelves, I sort of balked. I hadn't realized that they were school aged and at Hogwarts. It may be a good idea to sort of mention or hint at their surroundings near the beginning of the story. Likewise, who is the boy that is sitting with them that only appears in the first few paragraphs? Maybe clear that up a bit too, does he stand up and walk away? He too is out after curfew. My only other critique is to tighten up your use of she vs. their names. I know it's tough writing in the third person when everyone is the same gender, but the overuse of their names is better than saying she and leaving the answer to -which she- out. I've found that using descriptions like -the red headed girl sat next to her best freind albus- instead of she sat by albus helps to clear up the identity problem without using and reusing their names. Please don't take my criticisms negatively!! I really only bother to point out critique points in stories that I feel are worth it!! I really enjoyed this story and found the progression of their characters to be very well written.

All in all, Good job!!
Melissa

Author's Response: Melissa!!

Thank you so much for reviewing and of course I won't take them negatively! The whole point of reviews is to help improve writing :)

Aha I see what you mean about the 'boy'! They were originally in the kitchens with Tom, but then I changed my mind and must have missed that line - my bad!!

I will definitley add a bit more of a description to emphasise their surroundings - I think because in my head I knew they were in the kitchens that I just assumed everyone would, thank you for pointing that out :)

I was really stuggling with the 'she' issues when I wrote this - third person isn't my forte - and so will take that idea on board straight away!!

Thank you so much for reviewing this, you really have helped me more than you might realise!!

Rach xx


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