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Review #1, by Millarz An Epiphany of Sorts

3rd March 2012:
This was rather interesting and enjoyable! I liked how Gellert had a sort of epiphany and tried to save the wizarding world, though for such an old man, I'd think he'd rather be more set in his ways. He switches to being "the good guy" a bit quickly, and you could make him have more of a conflict before deciding whether or not telling Voldy the info would be better. For such a powerful wizard, I'd think he would know what legilimency (excuse my spelling) is too. Other than that, I loved the regret he had and how Voldy was loving being better than him! I didn't know we were allowed to re-post out WD entries! Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I made Voldemort use (successfully) legilmency because it says that Voldemort uses it in the book, I believe. Thanks! Congrats again. I am working on a couple new one shots and novels. Post on my MTA page becuase I cannot say what they are because of double posting. If someone posts something though, then I can reply. I am also cooking up a new challenge. hope you will enter. Thanks again!
-Fawkes


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Review #2, by BoOkWoRm24 An Epiphany of Sorts

31st January 2012:
This was an interesting idea and generally I think your execution was good. My only complaint is that you were a little repettive in some spots. For example in the first paragraph you use the word prison a lot. Other than that you did a really good job

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I had to stretch the story just a little bit to fit the word minimum for the competition. I added a couple extra paragraphs to the original which is probably what was repetitive. Thanks for reviewing!
-Fawkes


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