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Review #1, by HufflepuffMegan Distance and Loons

21st March 2017:
Wow. Just wow. I totally binge-read all of your chapters. I am in love! AHHH! The fluff, the ups and downs, the character development, everything is stunning! Keep up the outstanding work.


I would love to see more Lorcan as he Is the twin to Lysander and sibling to Lyra :) Just a little suggestion!

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Review #2, by Marlene Distance and Loons

19th March 2017:
I absolutely love this fic. Can't wat for the next chapter!

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Review #3, by daisyroot Distance and Loons

11th March 2017:
I love love love Lyra and James together - their chemistry is amazing! Can't wait for the next update!

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Review #4, by Violet Potter 434 Distance and Loons

5th March 2017:
love this, love you
write more soon please, its going great
from me xx

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Review #5, by Nameless Distance and Loons

2nd March 2017:

I love this story and was so happy to see it updated that I had to go back and reread from the beginning!!

I'd love to see more Lorcan, especially an interaction between him and Lysander.

Does roxy have a secret boyfriend? And what is ho with scorpious??

I really like Lyra and totally feel for her and all her confusion!

Keep it up!

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Review #6, by julie Fame and Fury

12th February 2017:
It`s been too long since the last chapter, write a new one, please:) I know i`ll be waiting for it eagerly

Author's Response: New chapter is out! :)

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Review #7, by Nera Fame and Fury

29th December 2016:
Keep us posted on how the new chapter is going, please. Liked the story so far, hopefully the new chapter is coming soon.

Author's Response: Updated now! Sorry for the wait, but thanks so much for the review!

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Review #8, by Violet Potter 434 Fame and Fury

11th December 2016:
is it just me or does Roxy like Bash?

I think she does

anyways as always another amazing chapter and I cannot wait for more!


Author's Response: It does look a bit like it... you'll find out the truth soon!
Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #9, by Kristina1990 Fame and Fury

7th December 2016:
If that's what a filler chapter looks like - just continue with them, they are fun to read ;). And *sigh* worthy... And a little frustrating, because it's SO OBVIOUS.

Ah well, it will all turn out for the best in the end :).

Author's Response: Aw thanks! I will haha and I feel like at this stage it's so obvious it's becoming a bit ridiculous!
But there's still gotta be some curveballs thrown in there ;)
Thanks so much for reviewing!

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Review #10, by julie Fame and Fury

7th December 2016:
Just wanted to let you know that I liked this chapter very much:) Interaction between James and Lyra was interesting and I really can`t wait to read more. I`m already starting to feel a bit sorry for Bash when this two get together.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like it, and I've already started working on the next chapter :)

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Review #11, by julie Quaffles and Kisses

3rd December 2016:
How is the new chapter going? You stopped writing about progress with new chapters on your profile, so I was just wondering when to expect a new one?

Author's Response: I've had some major writers block lately but I'm very close to finishing it now, and I'll continue to update the status on my profile if that helps :)

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Review #12, by julie Quaffles and Kisses

2nd November 2016:
This story really needs to be updated soon! Please don`t keep us waiting any longer...

Author's Response: Working on it! October was super busy for me but I'll have more time to write this month.

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Review #13, by julie Quaffles and Kisses

8th October 2016:
When can we expect a new chapter? With everything that's happened in this one I would very much like to know how things progress from here:) Poor James, I think he will be the first to realize his feelings for Lyra, if that is not already the case. Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm so happy you're interested in the story! I'm working on the next chapter now, although it might be a week or two before it's completed.

Poor James indeed, although I don't think he does a lot to help his own situation... :)

Thanks again!

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Review #14, by Violet Potter 434 Quaffles and Kisses

22nd September 2016:
awww I love this story too!

(hey by the way! by now you should of go tmy review on your new story, if not ello deary!)

I have to say tho, out of the two I prefure this one, but then you do only have 2 chapter of the other one so...???

but this one is amazeballs

I lurve it

can't wait for more of it, tho you did say you were kinda stuck

from me xxx

ps. I prefer James to Bash

Author's Response: I'm so happy that you like it!

I did see your review on my other story, thank you so much for taking the time to read them both! :)

I was stuck in the beginning but I've gotten past that now and I have this entire story planned out so I hope to get through the chapters pretty quickly so I can work on my other stories.

Thanks again for reviewing, I hope you'll continue to read in the future!

ps. me too... :)

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Review #15, by Luna Quaffles and Kisses

17th September 2016:
I like how Lysander is so overreacting, it's so dramatic!
But I just don't know how I feel about bash, is he really perfect or is there something of about him?
Also does James like Lyra or not?

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Lysander does have a flair for the dramatic, doesn't he? As does most of his family!

I feel like Lyra thinks Bash is "perfect", obviously she feels very strongly about him, but whether he's perfect for her is another question entirely :)

And James? Well, he does a very good job of convincing himself he doesn't...

Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #16, by Nameless Quaffles and Kisses

16th September 2016:

I love this story so far, it is really captivating. I think you did an excellent job on the Quidditch match - honestly I am not a big fan of reading the play by play of the games, as I feel no one can do really do it like JKR but you did great :)

I also love the invention of Lyra and how you did not portray all the Scamandres the same, you gave them room to be their own person.

and James... you did an awesome job with his character, i totally feel like he is a real person! I love Next Gen fics about him and you did a wonderful job portraying him!

Keep it up and cant wait for next chapter,


Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm so happy to hear you like the Quidditch match, of course JKR is Queen!!

That's the best compliment ever! I've tried to make the Scamander children all unique in their own way yet they still work together as one cohesive unit when they have to :)

And James... I struggled with his character a bit at first (as did Lyra!) but I'm really happy with how he's turned out. Thanks again for an amazing review!

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Review #17, by julie Secrets and Sorry's

19th August 2016:
Very interesting story, still cannot decide which one of your stories I like best:) I usually don`t read next generation stories because they are never believable, but everything about this one really is. I especially like your characters, you write them wonderfully. So I hope there is going to be a new chapter out soon

Author's Response: I'm just happy you like them both!! Thank you so much for your review, it's so great to hear you think it's believable... especially when so much of it is not canon! i hope you continue reading, thanks again! :)

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Review #18, by Lizzie G Secrets and Sorry's

17th August 2016:
So, I just read all 6 chapters in one go, so this is probably just gonna me rambling about the story so far, lol.

I like the fact that Lyra seems to be stepping away (or just forgetting) her plan of stealing James' captainship. Lyra and James' arguments aside, he seems to be a pretty great captain, even if he pushes them hard he also helps them with schoolwork and generally wants the team to be the best he knows the can be, and he listens to them. I thought Lyra was petty and childish in the first chapters, because it seemed like she only wanted to be captain because James was. But I do think her plan will come back to bite her in the end, even if she gives it up - she did tell Scorpious about it, right? And he obviously doesn't like James, so there might be some conflict going forwards. :)

- I love how mature you've made your two main characters, despite having the usual flair for dramatics that teenagers often have, they're also able to apologize to each other when they're in the wrong. Which I guess comes from knowing each other their entire lives, but it's refreshing to read!

- I so want to know what Bash deal is, he seems interested in Lyra, but at the same time it looks like he's aware of the fact that James has his eyes on her so I don't know if he's being genuine in his interest in Lyra or not (and he seems kinda sleazy, at least compared to James, lol).

- James being mad when accused of cheating on his former girlfriend? Hmm, something tells me Lyra doesn't know the whole story..

- LOVE that Saffi, horrible as she is, was mad about the shoes and not mad about James going after Lyra when she found them snogging (y)

- the lake scene was fantastic, both the awkwardness of having to apologize and the sudden sexual tension was so great, and I can only hope it promises good things in the future

- honestly, the fact that both your main characters are flawed but still very likable is a testament to your good writing (I think all of your characters are really good and well thought out)

I really love this story, even if I didn't really like the concept of someone trying to steal a position by tricking someone into fallen in love with you (it only leads to heartbreak and hurts), I've been pleasantly surprised and I can't wait for your next update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to write such a thoughtful review! Lyra's plan pretty much sucked, and she's realising that now haha but her dream is truly to be Captain, she loves Quidditch so much that it's like the ultimate honour for her.

I think that with Lyra and James because they've grown up together, they'll always care about each other so deep down they don't want to see the other hurt, but they're kind of figuring each other out in a new way now that they're older (and hormones are running rampant haha)

I love Bash, and his interest in Lyra is definitely genuine, but he is very, very intuitive (He's aiming to be an Auror, remember?) and sees things that other people probably don't.

Saffi is so fun to write! So shallow haha she's never even thought of Lyra as any kind of threat (Lydia is a different story however).

I'm really happy you like the story! Thank you so much again for the review! I'm already working on the next chapter :)

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Review #19, by Vanillaberries Maybe's and I-Don't-Know's

15th August 2016:
This story doesn't get nearly enough reviews! I really love the progression of the story. I liked it at first, bot now I love it. I just hope you would update sooner!

I loved the last chapter - thought the fight was great - and also liked that James knows about Bash & Lyra. However, I do feel like that Lyra got the worse end of the argument - despite throwing Harry in James ' face - so I would have expected James to be a little less hard on her this chapter. But I guess she slapped him, so...

I really didn't want to like Bash, but you do make me like him. I just don't think him and Lyra fit each other personality-wise, but his addition has definitely made the story more interested. I would be very curious to know what would happen if Lysander were to find out. I would imagine that Lyra first blames James for telling him, even though it seems likely he would.

I also wonder what Scorpius' beef with James is about. Hmm.

Anyways, thank you! This was a lovely update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm definitely trying to update a lot quicker now.

I know that James is being so so horrible to her, I just think he took the insult a bit (or a lot) more harshly then he should have. But they were both wrong at the end of it.

Ahh i'm so glad you like Bash! I didn't originally plan to have him in there so much but i really like him and think it adds a good element.

Again thank you so so much for reviewing!

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Review #20, by Adelaide Cadirin1207 Maybe's and I-Don't-Know's

14th August 2016:
Bash is so lovely and I really love him. But I also like James although he is the king of prats and he's so horrible to Lyra about Quidditch. Scorpius Louis and Albus are all so funny especially when Louis wore a dress. Please update again soon and thank you for writing this story.

Author's Response: Thank you! Isn't Bash just the best haha and James is very good at being horrible but I think he's better at being nice, once we get around to it :)

I'm so glad you liked it thank you again!

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Review #21, by Kristina1990 Candy and Chaos

29th May 2016:
I, for one, don't mind a darker turn ;). Wouldn't want to let things get boring, right?

It was a very low blow from Lyra to go for James' weakest spot, no matter what crap he pulls off. But it was also completely rude and unnecessary to tear a necklace into pieces and then throw it into the lake. That's bound to backfire.

But yeah... there is something going on there. And it will be a lot of fun to see it coming out! :)

Author's Response: Exactly! The angst just gives it the spice it needs haha.

It was so horrible of both of them, wasn't it? There's going to be a lot of regret on both parts I think.

Thank you so much for reviewing!

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Review #22, by dreamgazer220 Love and Bludgers

5th March 2016:
Hey there! Here for the HPFF Review-A-Thon :)

So, I've been meaning to read this story for a while now, and I'm glad I had the chance to dive in!

You've done a great job of creating these characters and developing their relationships so strongly. I love the dynamic between Lyra and James, and I'm so excited to see where this story is going to take them. It was a bit refreshing to see them bickering on the Pitch, then bickering some more, but then James being sort of nice and helping with her essay... and then it was back to bickering.

And I also love the dynamic you created between the three girls, Roxanne, Lyra, and Pippa. Pippa's comments about Lysander are wonderful, and you do such a great job of having them act as, well, teenagers.

The dialogue here is really strong too, and I love some of Lyra's inner narration as well.

The great thing about Next Gen is that there's so much freedom here, but you've already done a great job with everything. I can't wait to see how Lyra's plan to make James fall in love with her pans out - though it probably will have some bumps along the road that she isn't expecting ;)

Great first chapter! I can't wait to read more ♥


Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review, I'm so happy you got a chance to read it!
I just love getting feedback on the characters and the development of their personalities so i'm really grateful for your view! I hope you get to read the next chapters at some stage :)
Thanks again for the lovely review!

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Review #23, by Vanillaberries Detentions and Games

3rd February 2016:
I think you have real potential with this story! I think you are defining the characters just fine, although sometimes I feel you may need to take it a bit slower with the James and Lyra interactions. That being said, the fact that you're enjoying writing this story is the most important thing as happy writer = amazing story = happy readers. And that I definitely am - keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I understand completely what you mean about taking it slower with James and Lyra, so far I'm just laying the scene for how these two have kind of interacted their whole lives, growing up together. But there will be more then a few hiccups along their way, I'm sure. Thanks again!

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Review #24, by Ana Tempers and Tantrums

19th December 2015:
This story is hilarious! I love Lyra's character so much. Her banter with James is hysterical! I can't wait to see them together.

Author's Response: Ahh I'm so glad you think it's funny! I'm used to writing more darkness and angst so humor is very new for me, thanks for the review!

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Review #25, by Ginny the Chaser Tempers and Tantrums

31st August 2015:
Hey! I'm just writing to say I absolutely love this story. I started reading it today and I can't wait to see where you take it. I absolutely love your writing style. You have a brilliant talent. I cannot wait for the next chapter. The way you've written James II, Scorpius and the Scamander twins is exactly the way I've imagined them to be. Thank you! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's so nice to hear especially because this is my second story so I"m a little bit more unsure with it.
Thanks for the amazing review I hope you continue to read in future!

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