Reading Reviews for The Story of Susan Wheele
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Review #1, by starryskies55 Crazy Girl

6th April 2012:
Love potion? Susie! How could you! - wait, that's my fault. As you were. :D

Again, Susie is so likeable in an oh-my-gosh-she's-actually-scientifically-insane kinda way. That's good, by the way :D She's hilarious- and don't say 'yarp' (Hot Fuzz!)

Anyway, although this chapter is pretty short, it is very good. The cliff-hanger at the end! Although, it is highly unlikely that Susie will manage to do all of those things- so I think Plan B is looking fairly likely.

There's a few spelling/grammar mistakes again, but we're all human and it's nothing a quick Beta can't fix :D

My favourite line: "Always agree with him, no arguments with him. Or anyone. Especially not myself." Good plan, Susie!

Another great chapter- I'll hopefully be posting the results later today :D

Farewell from the super-evil Challenge-master.

Author's Response: I love this review. Hehee, it made me happy.

Thanks by the way, you've made me love Susan so much. Thank you for giving me her! :)

It is pretty short because I just wanted to put something out there and I couldn't think of anything else to write. I felt like a cliff-hanger was needed at this point :D

I really should look into getting a beta, I'll do that soon.

Woo I got quoted and results might be up, looks to be a good day :)

Thanks for the review :D

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Review #2, by starryskies55 The Worst Day In History

6th April 2012:
The thing I love best about this, is how relatable you've made Susie. Everyone fancies someone, everyone thinks their friends are nut jobs, and yes, teenage boys are in fact terrified of crying/ displays of emotion.

You've got a few issues with grammar, and I don't think this flows very well- but saying that, the mistakes were fairly few and far between.

Susie's commentary on life is just hilarious, and your imagery and language is perfect for her character I think: child-like but fairly descriptive too.

Overall, a pretty good story :D

Hugs and kisses, the evil Challenge-master.

Author's Response: Thankyou! I did try to make her relatable so yay!

Yeah it wasn't the best chapter and now that its been posted I've realised that it doesn't exactly read well. I should really go back and change that.

Thankyou anyway evil Challenge master. :D

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Review #3, by Cavell The Worst Day In History

4th April 2012:
Hello, it's Cavell here, and I've come to check out your story! It is really quite good so far, and Susie is really funny. Poor her! But it's okay, as I hate Wednesdays too. There are a couple of spelling/grammar mistakes, but it is easy to overlook them. Great story, and please update soon!

Author's Response: Hello :)
Thank you for at least coming to check it out. We all know how much we hate Wednesdays, they're terrible.
Hopefully I'll get round to getting a beta soonish so that will help.
Thank you for the great review :D x

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Review #4, by NeverKnew The Worst Day In History

10th March 2012:
Well dear, I've read both chapters, and currently, I like it.
BUT (because there is always one of those) it wasn't as smoothe as I thought it could be. A few times I had to go back and read again, but maybe that's just me. I always find that reading the story out loud helps with that! Anyway, I'll be back to find out what happens.

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Review #5, by shadowcat2 A Meeting in the Kitchens

17th February 2012:
Hey! Susie is amusing. Her crush on Remus is adorable. Did you mean to write the whole chapter in italics though? Apart from the little grammatical mistakes here and there, this is a very cute first chapter.

P.S. I entered for the same challenge as well. I didn't write a single thing yet though. hehe.

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for reviewing :)
No I've no idea how it all ended up in italics :/ I'll need to fix it later. Thank you though for actually reviewing.

Don't worry you've got loads of time and it'll end up great :D

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Review #6, by starryskies55 A Meeting in the Kitchens

31st January 2012:
Heya! It's the CHALLENGE-MASTER, mwa ha ha ha ha. :)
Really liked the start of this, I'm kinda guessing where the potion is going to come in! :)
Poor Remus. Coffee all over him, and yes, I do think that you should be able to adopt house-elves. They would be muchly awesome.
And I love Pretty Woman! Basically, I really like this...
But from a constructive point of view, you've got a few grammar/spelling mistakes, and is the whole chapter supposed to italicised? :)
Can't wait until the next bit! :D

Author's Response: Hey!
Thank you, glad you liked it. Now that you've mentioned it I do notice a few mistakes and no I have no idea how that happened. :/
Glad you liked it though. :)

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Review #7, by magicmuggle01 A Meeting in the Kitchens

31st January 2012:
A nice start to what sounds like an interesting story. I could not help but laugh at the coffee in the face. Brilliant. 10/10 for your start and adding to favs so I know when you update.

I have also entered the same challange. Please check out my one shot, it's called the tale of Rory Delaney.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, this is a great review. :)
I've read yours too, in my favourites now. It was so good.

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