Oh my goodness Emily. Do you realise how amazing this is? I mean, sndjjnfjnf I'm speechless. I could feel every emotion and... AGGGHHH, it was just AMAZING!!! Like really, really, really, really, really amazing! And I love Jilly, they're too amazing! And Omg, dnfjndfjnf, too amazing Em, not fair!
And as I said in the text, I think you have a wonderful talent and I think you should never stop writing, and I honestly don't know what else to say apart from this one shot is AMAZING!
xx 10/10 xx Report Review
Okay, this was cute. This was adorably cute. I wasn't expecting to have such a reaction to a fic based on a Snow Patrol song, but... d'aww.
James' voice here is perfect. He's the right mix of sarcasm and adorableness, and I like him. You've managed to go from his self-depreciating humour and teenage boy-ness to the more poetic descriptions of Lily without it feeling jarring, so well done on that.
Seconds later, she's pushing her warms hands through my own locks
Can I just inquire as to who refers to their own hair as 'locks'? :P
Slightly less minor nitpick:
The shift in narrative voice from James-talking-to-imaginary-Lily-in-second-person to James describing his actual interaction with Lily is a bit confusing, because it's just a bit like Monty Python - and now for something completely different... you know what I mean? It's a bit too subtle. I mean, that could be just me being weird, but still.
Also, Imperius curse as a prank? Dude. Pads wouldn't do that (or have I just missed the point and James is just being stupid?).
Anyway. Despite this being rather critique-heavy, I did very much enjoy this fic - I love a good bit of fluff, and this was a very good bit of fluff - and it made me smile. So thank you, and well done. :) Report Review
Awww. I loved this story. So very touching. Great job.Author's Response: Thanks :3 Report Review
I was so glad you reviewed me, I thought I'd come over and check out some things of yours! I really liked this little one-shot. Lily and James are my all-time favorites, and I really liked this portrayal of them. I loved how passionate James was about Lily, and how nervous he was about what she was going to say to him. He thinks she hates him...and she loves him. Love it.
Great job, congratulations!Author's Response: Aww :) Thanks! This was one of my favourite challenges to do, as it just SCREAMED James/Lily, and they are one of my favourite pairings :) Yeah, I wasn't sure whether they'd be friends or not in their seventh year, but I sorta went with the stereotype, but not so much that they're best mates. I love my little one shot :) [I hope that doesn't sound stuck-up..! S:]
Emily x x Report Review
I really liked this! You built up to the end really well and your descriptions of people are spot on - especially Lily's!
Also I love Snow Patrol and James/Lily ships - so this was a great combo for me!:D
Thanks for the swap!
Lucy :) xAuthor's Response: Aww thanks! :D I really enjoyed writing this in the present tense, as I've never done anything like that before x)
And I wasn't really that into SnowPatrol until I wrote this... now I'm addicted ;)
And your welcome! :D
Emilyy :) x x Report Review
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