I really like how you made Ginny not completely O.K with moving so fast like other stories. Can't wait for the next chapter Report Review
I have speculated before of Ginny's attitude toward Harry, Teddy, and marriage. Now I'm afraid that it's way more than that. Did something unknown happened to Ginny at Hogwarts with the Carrows ? Maybe she feels like if she gets engaged that she'll become a mother instantly and miss out on being young? I do hope you have the next chapter getting ready for post.
PS Ron and Hermione on the other hand are moving smoothly (what a surprise)! But nice to see.Author's Response: We'll find out more about Ginny's feelings, but really I just think it's that she's scared. I mean, she's only seventeen. Living with someone is a big step for someone that age, and then they have a part time baby and jobs..
The next chapter will be out soon, and as for Ron and Hermione, they're still happy for now in their new-relationship bubble.
Thank you so much for all these fantastic reviews. They really have been so helpful for me :) Report Review
Well at least they had Christmas. Though I loved Harry's gift to Teddy, I would have thought a stuffed wolf would have been given too. Ron and Hermione are really unbelievable. How amazing they are together. I am wondering though what Harry and Ginny gave each other. I suppose Ginny's reaction to Molly admiring Harry's fathering skills, perhaps scared her because she isn't ready to be a Mum. Could be she isn't sure just what Harry is planning for the future. I must continue.
FoMAuthor's Response: Thank you! Yes, Ron and Hermione are working well together at the moment - they're still in happy new couple mode. Don't worry: there will be drama to come ;)
It just gets darker and darker. So the Lestrange degenerates are active and around. I have a feeling that the watch would have led Dung to give it to Harry had he had it longer. Now I suspect you're going to wreck Harry's holiday. But they must be found and sent to Azkaban. This chapter was fantastic!
PS I love your magical imagination. Marauder 5 might have been your inspiration, but it came from your talents.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Although, as you will later read, Harry was not the intended target. And don't worry: here at the auror office we're working hard to find those brothers! Report Review
At last! I was waiting for the dark to show it's presence. The funny thing is I don't think Dung had a clue. How perfect and needed was Harry's gift. I do think though, Bill would have known anyway. At first I was afraid the Rita had snuck into the party. You are going to have to find something for Molly to do. She should teach household spells at Hogwarts.
FoMAuthor's Response: Yes, poor Dung. He really can't get it right, can he? I do think though that even Bill would have had trouble identifying the curse, as I talk about later on. You saw the effect it had on people - I doubt he would have been able to look away! And yes, I do need to occupy Molly somehow. That's a good idea for her... I'll think about that! ;) Report Review
A wonderful start for Bills birthday. Harry's gift sounds very, very, intriguing. It's good to see Hagrid again and to hear about Norberta. I bet she would still recognized her 'Mummy'. On to the next.
FoMAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
That was awesome. The exchange between Teddy and the Wolf was totally unexpected. It's a good thing Teddy can only change his hair color. My heart did sigh a bit. I hope Remus was looking on. I think what Ginny felt was the loss of Tonks. That Dora should have been the one with Teddy. Harry's lack of parcel tongue was not a huge surprise, as most authors write the same. I do like it when he can. He doesn't have to use it for bad. I must go on.
FoMAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked Teddy's reaction to the wolf. I wanted to make it clear from early on that although he's found a sort-of family, he will still miss his real parents for the rest of his life.
Thank you for all your reviews - I really appreciate them :) Report Review
I do like peaceful, normal and easy going chapters. But I am wary of what may come. I loved Harry's line about Kreacher. He may not bite, but he will let Miss Hermione know how unhappy he is. I think for Kreacher being appreciated by Harry and friends, being complimented about his house and cooking skills, not to mention how happy they are with him. Teddy is adorable. At 6 months he might be a little young to crawl, but we are talking about Magicals. They definitely do things different than Muggles. I must go on.
FoMAuthor's Response: Haha, I'm glad you liked the bit about Kreacher. I like to have him included :)
I'm happy you liked seeing Teddy - unfortunately I'm no expert on optimal crawling ages, but the websites I looked at when writing this chapter seemed to point me there. Who knows, though? It changes a lot with regular muggle babies, so it really could be any age with a wizard. Also, I thought he'd be more fun to write if he were a little more than an adorable blob :) Report Review
Wonderful and sweet chapter. I do hope at some point you'll have more dialogue. You're setting up a more peaceful time. There will be some down and dangerous times ahead. I'm looking forward to what you have in mind.
FoMAuthor's Response: Thank you! Yes, I know that these chapters are a little thin on the dialogue front. the next chapters are more wordy, but I do plan to edit this soon :) Report Review
You wrote this chapter almost perfectly. I say almost as I don't understand why they don't recognize their surroundings. Yes, Hermione restored their memories of who they are, but how does that wipe out where they are? This is the first time I've seen that happen. Ron has finally reached in and become the man he is destined to be. I see him so much like Arthur. I must go on.
FoMAuthor's Response: I always just assumed that when a memory charm is lifted, the memories of your old life flood back while the 'fake' life you've been living fades away. I suppose it could be done either way - Rowling never gave us any examples of this happening, so I just wrote what I always thought would happen. I'm glad you're enjoying the story! Report Review
OMG your story is amazing, please continue it its very addictive and sounds just like it should be the way it is.. Report Review
I am speechless. How is it that Hermione didn't go to Australia during the summer? I can see why she didn't go off to Hogwarts. Ron was incredibly sweet. I can't wait to see your version of the trip Down Under.
FoMAuthor's Response: I think Hermione would wait until the immediate effects of the battle are over and everyone's started recovering. She's also want to make sure that everything was safe before visiting her parents. Also, perhaps she was avoiding the awkward conversation she'll have to have: 'sorry Mum and Dad. I altered your memories and made you move to Australia'. I know I'd be scared of my parents' reaction. Report Review
Whoa! I certainly didn't expect Ginny's reaction to Harry's statement. I supposed that she has had to justify everything she has wanted to do all her life. Well she did have some autonomy at Hogwarts, but for the most part she was always under one of her brothers eye. I do hope she learns to chill. So does her playing on the under 20 team, mean she won't be going back to school? How's Molly going to react to that? I must go on, as this is a really good story!
FoMAuthor's Response: Thank you! Yes, as great as Ginny is, she can be a bit fiery. From the books, what always seemed to annoy her the most was people trying to tell her what she can and can't do. She's a very independent person, and for someone whose brothers are always watching over her, I guess she just doesn't want Harry to do that as well.
An interesting and different approach to Auror training. I'm amazed that Harry was tested with Occulmency. How many of the other recruits had that experience? I'll bet not many. But like he bullied his way out of Snapes attack, and his link to Riddle, he triumphed again. Hooray for Harry, and for you for this story.
FoMAuthor's Response: Thank you! All the recruits were tested in occlumecy, but I wanted to show how Harry's progressed as a man from fifth year when there was almost no way he could achieve it.
Thank you for your reviews - they're all really helpful :) Report Review
I liked it! But I must mention a needed correction. When Kreacher saw Harry is was almost like he hadn't seen them since they left 12 Grimmauld Place. Kreacher was at Hogwarts and led the House Elves into the Battle. I was hoping we'd see Teddy soon.
PS Briliant should be spelled Brilliant. Sorry, I just want to see your story presented in it's best light.Author's Response: Yes that's true - I need to change that, it completely slipped my mind when I wrote that. And don't worry, Teddy's going to appear soon for you :)
Thanks for flagging that spelling up - when I'm typing fast I lose count of letters ;) I'll edit that now.
Thanks for all these reviews - I really appreciate your input :) Report Review
Are you writing another chapter? Because that was an awful place to stop and I love your story. I would give you a 10/10 but you haven't finished it. At least I hope not!Author's Response: Haha, sorry! that's all for now - cliffhangers are my lifeblood. But this definitely isn't the end of the story, so don't worry! The goal is to finish at the DH epilogue :) Report Review
Hm? I am surprised that Molly didn't go ballistic. Finally Arthur is present. His chat with Harry was sweet, trying to be concerned for both of his "kids". I can't wait to go on.
FoMAuthor's Response: Yeah, thinking about that now it does seem a touch unlikely - I've been meaning to edit these early chapters, so thanks for the advice! :) Report Review
Good natural progression chapter. I would have expected though for Harry, Ron and Hermione would have received letters or a visit from the new Head. I would have liked more dialogue with this one, as now that they've rested it's time to get out of their heads and talk. Also I realized we haven't heard or seen Arthur. Hmmm! But I am excited to continue.
FoMAuthor's Response: Yes, I need to thicken out these initial chapters a little, I agree. And I definitely need to get Arthur in there at some point! Thanks for the advice :) Report Review
Another wonderful chapter. I will point out some possible typos. I noticed some names that should have been capitalized but weren't all the way through. Otherwise, I loved that Harry and Ginny got it together and felt bad that Ron, again stuck his foot in his mouth. Instead he should go with his actions instead. Hopefully they get it sorted out soon.
FoMAuthor's Response: Yes, I've been meaning to go back and fix the typos - thank you for reminding me of them! Glad you liked the chapter :) Report Review
I saved this a while ago. I'm glad I waited as it looks like I have a big chunk to read. If the rest are as good as this, I'm going to be very happy. The way you started it was good, not over the top, or full of angst. Sure there was grief, but it was a natural flow of sadness. Fred's burial was great! The use of patronuses was incredible. I see wonderful things for this fiction.
FoMAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! Report Review
This is probably my favorite fan fiction!! I love that you stick to the story line and add little things that would really happen like reg cattermole's letter or audrey and percy. You are staying true to JK rowling's story and characters, yet adding a very interesting story line. Amazing job! And please write the next chapter soon- i look this story up every time I come on this website XDAuthor's Response: Aw thank you! I really appreciate that! Chapter 17 is coming very soon and I promise it's going to be a big one ;)
Thank you so much for your reviews! Report Review
Great story! Please continue! But what is wrong with Ginny?Author's Response: Thank you! And you will be finding out very, very soon ;) - keep reading! :D Report Review
hi! I just wanted to let you know that I had some questions about this chapter that I PM'ed you on the forums! :) check it out and get back to me when you have time! ;)Author's Response: Heading over there right now to check it out :) Report Review
Nice job! Really realistic and fun to read! I loved how you talked about georges guilt about angelina because the fact he ends up with freds girlfriend has always bothered me. Also, i love that there are people like you that are makng sure harry potter's story never ends. Thanks!! Report Review
Great story. Keep up the great writing Report Review
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