Great chapter, I really enjoy this story...I want to find out more about Olivia, Al seems to still like her? Update soon:)Author's Response: Thank you and I can promise that more about Olivia will be revealed in the next few chapters, I will try my best :) Report Review
So good! Love when the guys are all trying not to laugh, and then James was all wierd, which was funny! Please update soon!Author's Response: Thank you :) and James is just a little on the wierd side all of the time ;) I love him... I'm thinking about writing a James/OC fic at some point actually... I've updated today so it shouldn't be too long :) Report Review
I love this book and this is my favorite chapter. Please keep writing.Author's Response: Thank you so much, I really appreciate the support, especially because some people really didn't like what I did in this chapter :) and I will do! Report Review
WHY IS IT SO BLOODY SHORT! I mean like I LOVED it, trust me. But it was short. Oh please please please make the next chapter longer. Oh James, the all knowing James knows exactly what happened that night. I half expected her to burst. A DATE WITH HIM! IM SO EXCITED SO PLEASE MAKE A SPEEDY UPDATE!! FOR YOUR DEDICATED FANS!!Author's Response: Haha, sorry they are getting longer ... It takes me so long to write them that they always end up shorter than I want them too ... I will try to increase chapter length! Haha, James knowlegde will come into play in later chapters so I'm glad you noticed! I've already written the date bit and will update as soon as I can ... I uploaded a chapter image of Anya and I have to wait for that to be validated first... Thank you for your nice comments though :) Alice Report Review
Nice, Al being a cocky bastard ;) Then turning back to his sweet self- he doesn't half have mood-swings!!! :P I love this story, it's so funny xD
Nice going with James and the Slytherins making comments... Update soon xxxAuthor's Response: Haha, Al's less of a joker than James but he can still be a "cocky bastard" as you put it ;) and thats sort of part of his character ... I plan to reveal more about him soon! I'll try to do so by the end of the week :) xxx Report Review
Wow! Huge chapter!! Please update soon! Really liked this!Author's Response: Hey, thank you, I really appreciate reviews for this chapter as I was a little unsure about it. I'm really happy that you liked it :) I plan to update as soon as the staff holiday is over (July 7th) :) Report Review
YEAH! IM SOO HAPPY FOR ANYA!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON FOR MY PERSONAL WELL BEING!!! YOU WUDNT WANG ME TO DIE!!!Author's Response: Hey, I'm so glad you liked it... a few people thought it wasn't very good and I was starting to feel really down about it. You've cheered me up :) I've written the next chapter but because of the staff holiday i'm not allowed to update until the 7th, but as soon as HPFF will let me the next chapter will be up :D Alice Report Review
LOL... This was actually quite a funny chapter... LOVED IT Report Review
Ah. He better have a good excuse cuz he's bloody making me angry Report Review
I LOVED THIS CHAPTER SO FREAKING MUCH! The almost kiss, drunk James, and THE WANTED!Author's Response: I love The Wanted ... And I love that song ;) Report Review
...WHAT. JUST. HAPPENED. Please excuse me while I have my jaw reattached to my face; it fell off around the point where I realized that Anya wasn't actually drunk in the hallway. HOLY MOTHER OF TOAST. THIS WAS JUST INSANE. I CAN'T EVEN HANDLE IT BECAUSE IT'S SO INSANE.
That was completely mad. I think it was very out of character for both Anya and Al. I previously didn't see Anya as the type of girl to take off her clothes at the drop of a hat, but I guess I was wrong. Al was a total git also. He let his effing roommates ogle the girl he just shagged - in her underwear on his bed. And then he told them that they shagged. And then he made one of his roommates take her away. What. The. Hummus.
The whole paragraph of transitioning from "saving Anya" to "having sex" was really rushed. They totally didn't have any reason to do it, and it showed. They didn't have enough sexual tension, they were both completely in their right minds - heck, Al was possibly still even thinking about Olivia - and I'm pretty sure that was both their first times. It didn't make sense to me.
I hope I don't offend you with any of this! I just felt it was not up to your usual standards at all.
-CatAuthor's Response: I don't really know what happened either and I thought that the people who read might be a bit shocked but I'm going to try and justify it...
Pretty much part of the reason I did it was because it was so unlike them (although I'm gunna let on that it isn't their first time). It's the whole idea of love making you do crazy things. Plus I just felt as if I needed to add in a bit of the crazy. It won't be something they do again but it will give them something to think about... It wasn't a planned moment.
It wasn't actually part of the story plan but it felt right to me so I just went with the flow...
I'm going to go away and re-read it and maybe if it is really really bad then i'll just delete it and re-write the chapter...
Alice Report Review
Hm. This was a very interesting display of events... I am silently debating how long it will take her to figure out. Report Review
Obviously, Anya gets the rottenest luck Report Review
This was short but eventful... I winder what the heck they have planned next... Report Review
She is so not going to succeed. Their plan is gunna be crazier than crazy... If that's possible Report Review
We certainly have some issues now dint we ;) Report Review
I'm sorry for all the short reviews but I really want go read more but I don't want your amazing and talented work to go unnoticed. BTW, all of your chapter titles make perfect sense.Author's Response: Hey, thank you for all of the reviews! I appreciate it :) and I try to make sure that people can link chapter titles to the story. Feel free to review as many chapters as you like :) Report Review
All I can say for the ending of the chapter is... Like father like son. And I'm positive I know why Scorpius qas so fiity... Report Review
I really like this story! Please update soon! Really want to know who this Olivia chick is, and what's going to happen next with Anya and Al! < so cute btw! Love it!Author's Response: Hey, thank you :) I will try and get the next chapter in tonight and then hopefully it will get through in time, before the staff go on holiday :) It's all going to be revealed at some point so keep reading ;) Thank you :) Report Review
This was better with the punctuation, but still needs some edits. I'm a little confused. Was this chronologically right after last chapter?
Aaand now there's a mystery heartbreaker in the mix! Gosh, poor Al has so much drama. ;) And really?? You see an upset girl sitting there on the floor... So you TAKE HER TO YOUR DORM? (On second thought, Al deserves the drama.) Poor, poor Anya. She doesn't know what she's getting herself into...
Thanks for the quick updates!
-CatAuthor's Response: This takes place the morning after the last chapter, so Al is waking up and realising what he has done etc.
Haha, Evil Olivia ;) I can't wait to write more about her! Haha, well I wanted a major Al and Anya moment in the next chapter and because of how late it was and how upset she was it seemed like a kind of good but stupid thing Al would do. He just asks for the drama!
I hope to get the next one in soon, maybe tonight if I can :) Alice Report Review
Ahhh Al is so stupid, it's completely obvious he likes her and now she's all sad and confused :( Still though, at least they're talking now! Can't wait for the next one! Report Review
Aha! I see it all, now. I get it. I'm in the /know./ Al = such a stupid boy. Poor Anya :( This chapter needs editing, but the storyline is coming along nicely. Excited for Al's POV next! :) Oh, and just to clarify: it's been 3 weeks since the NMK? Or since the start of the story? I'm a little confused.
Thanks for a really quick update!
-CatAuthor's Response: I've updated so the chapter in Al's POV should be up in the next couple of days :) It should give you a better understanding of his character. I'm so rubbish at spelling/grammer, sorry! I will get round to editing eventually, I promise!
It has been three weeks since the NMK. In the story it's probably getting towards the end of November ... I really want to write Christmas so I'm trying to move it along a bit. I've finished college so I have more free time :) Yey! Alice :)
Haha, I enjoyed the girls at the end. I'm really glad you added them :) That party was hilarious. It's a shame that Albus didn't stick around...
Albus moments! Wooo! I like how he threatened to "break James' broom" if he mentioned his little infatuation with Anya - classy, Al, real classy. ;) That whole owlrey scene was amusing. I was a bit miffed that their little moment got cut short, but honestly, James is really entertaining.
Thanks for the update! :)
-CatAuthor's Response: I love the girls so much. They're amazing! I love a good party, I'll probably write another one at some point.
The next chapter is a bit of a twist, but the chapter after that is going to be in Al's POV so hopefully you'll get an insight into his character. I love James, I wish I could write more of him! I might work on that actually...
Glad you enjoyed, Alice :) Report Review
great chapter. Keep up the good work and update soon:) xAuthor's Response: Thank you, and I'm almost done with the next chapter so it shouldn't be too long :) x Report Review
Some interesting developments... Hmm :) Again, this really needs a good proofread, but the general gist of it is really good. The plot is coming along.
Was Al just acting vague because he just lost? That seems like a logical explanation to me. Or was it supposed to be about Anya?
The scene at the beginning was funny, but I wish that she's woken up just to see their reactions. What was she confused about then, also - who was there? Because that seemed pretty darn obvious to me.
The length is getting better! Thank you :) See you later, alligator!
-CatAuthor's Response: I'm trying to move it along :) and Al was acting vague because of just losing but also because he had been so distracted by Anya that he didn't see the snitch when it was right in front of him (as his normal position is seeker, I thought this would probably bother him).
I actually made a mistake in that first scene and haven't corrected it, I accidently put Al's name in and I wasn't supposed too. She was supposed to be confused just because of the concussion and because she didn't know Albus was there. I need to go back and do some corrections...
I'm working on the length :) in a while, crocodile! Report Review
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