Ha ha, great. I had to suppress the urge to laugh out loud when I read the title and the summary of this nice short story - I did chuckle silently to myself, though.
Funny, how these things work out: I'm an absolute sucker for the BBC Sherlock series and the very moment I saw The Woman (I've been checking out your page), I thought of Irene Adler in A Scandal in Belgravia. It's kind of curious how you transfer a more than 100-year-old literary character to a Harry Potter fan fiction - and quite amusingly so. But, somehow, I was bound to picture Percy Weasley as Mycroft Holmes (the one of the series), although this could probably be explained by the fact that both Mycroft and Percy are working for the government...
However, I'm excited to read the next two chapters and to learn how Irene, pardon, Audrey Adler got away this time. (Or not so much, she became Mrs. Weasley after all.) Report Review
I thought this was really interesting! I don't read much of this pairing but I love the portrayal of Audrey as Adler because I just love the characterization of her! She's seductive, teasing, secretive and very good at being a con artist. I just love how you've made her and her being like Percy's one weakness if that's the sort of thing you're going for. Percy is like you'd imagine Percy and I loved Kingsly as well. I just think that this is really interesting and intriguing and I really want to see where you go with this! :) xAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! I always see an 'Audrey and Percy pairing' and just think: "Oh God, how dull," which is really horrible of me. I've never tried to read one of them, because just the thought of someone identical to Percy Weasley just makes me drift off a little.
I wanted to portray her as someone utterly different from everything we expected. JK never told us anything about her, after all, so it was left open to our assumptions.
The way she's characterised in this lets Percy be someone different, too. She's unpredictable and a little off-the-rails so it's something completely unexpected for him to approach, and offers us a new side of him.
Thanks so much for the review and I'm really glad you enjoyed it! :) xxx Report Review
Amazing :) The tension between Audrey and Percy in the beginning of the chapter was wonderful! I love how uneasy he is around her, it's just how I always imagined Percy would be around Audrey; I think this was just so wonderful to read.
I loved all your detail. The moment at the end with George was really well written as well! Oh and the last line, was just perfect! She likes him back :D
I can't wait for the next chapter!! Amazing job, you should be proud of this! Good luck in your competion as well :)Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D
I admit I was a little proud of this chapter, and I'm glad you picked up on the points that I really struggled with. George, along with most of the family, near-despised Percy because of his actions before and during the war, so it was hard to think of a way that his brother could possibly see his newly redeemed qualities. I could have made Percy impossibly dull, and really dislikable, but would George really have put up with such a person?
"She likes him back." ...Or does she? Nah, I'm just kidding. ;)
As an obtuse sort of woman, I can't really let her feelings for him *show*. It wouldn't be in character for her to do so, and the sneaky little implications make her affections for him all-the-more rare and "special", I guess.
I'm so glad you liked it, and I'll get started on yours now! :) Bethan. xxx Report Review
Hey, thanks for the swap :)
This was fantastic :) Your detail was remarkable, and I think you wrote Percy's character very true to that in the books. I loved the interview with lenoard in the beginning, just something little but it was really funny!
I think someone's got a crush on Audrey, Mr. Weasley! Well I would hope, since.. well it's Audrey :) The "I think she's a conartist" part made me laugh. Percy's just fantastic at showing feelings, isn't he?
I loved Audrey's characteristics, she's just the firey personallity to lighten up the uptight Percy. Brilliant job with this, continuing now :)Author's Response: Thanks so much, Moonyxluna!
Ah, Percy's a bit of a newbie when it comes to love and all that jazz - he can't help the bland tone, and business and status is so much of a part of him that it drifts even into the dangerous area of romance.
When I got the challenge I was momentarily stunned - how could I possibly write a Percy/Audrey fic, two characters rumoured to be the dullest, most obnoxious there ever was, and make people want to read it?
"Fiery Audrey" was the key to that, I think. We were barely given anything about her in the Epilogue, so I thankfully had a lot to work with, and from there she was born.
Thanks so much for the review, and I'm glad you liked it! Bethan, xxx Report Review
Hi, it is me for your challenge review!
And this is a great! Before reading the authors note at the end, I thought Audrey Adler had a similar name to Irene and the surname really suited Audrey! As for the title of the story, I love it! This was a great and entertaining start. You had wonderful word choice, it flowed well and the dialogue is great! Well done!Author's Response: Thank you very much - I'm really glad you liked it! :) x Report Review
I've never been a Percy fan (and am still not) but this was an intriguing story. I loved the characterization you gave to everyone and the whole plot was great. 'Adler' was the perfect name for her, that was a really clever detail! I loved this character, and finally can actually believe of Percy being captivated by a woman. Even if you didnt continue it, this would be an outstanding one-shot, but DO please keep writing it!
10/10Author's Response: Thank you ever so much!
I'm not a Percy fan, either, but once I was given the challenge I didn't want to just back down. I think he was definitely more likeable after what he did in the war for his family, and I think you might like him more in the coming chapters (there'll be two!) though that's up for debate. ;D
It was really hard writing about him, if I'm honest, because I think I write my characters too nice a lot of the time, and though Percy IS nice, he's quite obnoxious and pompous, so I had to write him like that without over-doing it, but thank you so much for thinking I did it right. :)
Ah yes, Miss Adler... I was trying to think of a name for her, and I associated her character with someone *like* Irene Adler, so it just seemed logical to call her that - and it had a very nice ring to it. :D
This whole thing will be three chapters and the deadline is the end of February, so I'll definitely keep writing and update soon - I hope they're as good quality as you seem to think this one was! :L ;D
Thank you ever so much for the review, it's so, so appreciated!xxx Report Review
i like this a lot...and the banner is INCREDIBLEAuthor's Response: Thank you very much - haha, that was one of the first banners I've ever made! (Thank God for tutorials, eh?) Thank you! xxx Report Review
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