Gosh. That was a bit intense! For a James/Lily shipper, like me, I found this a bit sad. I feel like Severus deserved everything that happened to him. Which is quite ironic, since I am a Slytherin.
Anywho, I thought you did a great job with the overall story. Though, I think you could still add a little more intensity by 'delving' deeper into Snape's feelings. Just a thought! Like I said, you have a great story here! :D
Slytherin For The House Cup 2012,
Izzy xxAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm thinking of doing a re-write to see if I can explore his feelings a bit more, so watch this space!
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I thought it was good. :) There were a few grammar mistakes here and there but that's not a big deal, I'm not sure realistically speaking if Snape would have attended Lily's wedding, but for the purposes of this fic, it works! I liked how you coaxed some of the emotions out of Snape, some of them seemed a little OOC but overall I thought it was some lovely writing.Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it :)
I wanted it to be a little different for a Lily/Snape, so I hope it worked :)
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