This is a cute story. I was a little thrown off by the first person narrative, but I got over that quickly enough :)Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
This was really good! I loved the way your wrote the story, and Lily's interaction with James seemed so true to J.K.'s characters. Great job!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it =) Report Review
This was subtle and ridiculously adorable! sequel maybe? :D
Love your writing skills :)Author's Response: Haha, thanks! I'm not too sure about a sequel, but hopefully I can get more one-shots up sometime :) Report Review
I think that's one of the best short stories I've read so far! soo good :) I liked that it wasn't 'too much' but really subtle and nice :D good work! wished there was a second chapter/sequel though.. maybe? ;)Author's Response: Haha, thanks for your review! :) I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Report Review
I love the way you portrayed all of the characters in this. A lovely lil bit of writing. I almost wish there was more, but am very happing that it is just a snapeshot. Just enough to spur the imagination to continue on!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked this snapshot :) Report Review
Awww! I love this story! Love it, love it, love it!
Great writing! The story was so cute!
Keep on writing, you're awesome!Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) Report Review
This is adorable. I totally love the concept and idea. It's so simple yet effective. I especially like the point of view its written from with the inclusive use of 'you', it makes it really interesting to read. I also commend you for your characterisation of Lily and James, I think it's perfect. I liked how you made Lily quite open to James and how she took him quite seriously, as well as making their relationship at an acquaintance level. Very sophisticated, well done!Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'm really glad you liked the story. :) Report Review
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