I'm confused and intruiged! Please update soon!

Author's Response: You will see..!i have many things to do right now but i promise i will update as soon as i can!!
i'm glad you enjoyed the story!!
and thank you so much for reviewing!:)
~marlita

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Hello fellow Dramione-er :)

I'm interested to see what angle you take in tackling the Draco/Hermione dynamic. Does he not have a memory? Is that why he's like "do I know you?" in the summary? I guess I'll have to keep reading to find out!

A couple of pointers:

Your first paragraph kind of threw a lot of data at me as a reader. It seems like it's been five years since the end of the War but all of the kids seem to have lived at least 10 - 15 years worth in that time (Neville is already Headmaster?)

The tense changes from past to present from the beginning paragraph.

I'd take a look into getting a beta, just to help bounce drafts off of and help polish chapters up. You have a sense of flow and are willing to tell a story and I'd like to see you be able to do that with the help of someone who could give you some tips and tricks, so to speak.

Hermione seems to be more of the sarcastic/sardonic type than what I'm used to but you've at least slipped in some of the good ol' bookworm that we know. We never really hear of her having to find her parents so it's interesting that you're having that as the reason for her being in Australia.

Anyway, no need to take any of my advice above! :) It's awesome that you're taking on a long chaptered fic!

Char

Author's Response: hi char!:)
first of all thanks for taking the time to read/review my story.

No Draco hasn't lost his memory..*wink*
But you will have to wait and see...

i know i messed up with the tenses but that's because i wrote a little bit everytime and i kept changing it... :$
i'm def going to edit it!
did i mention that the time frame is five years after the great war? I think i wrote that it's been five years since hermione came in australia..
neville is recently assigned as headmaster, plus hermione didn't go to look for her parents straight after the war was over. Ministry did some work for her but came out empty and then she decided to go look on her own..
Many many things happened during that time..i'm not giving out anything just yet...
thanks for the valued feedback once again!!and yeah a beta is an option i was considering too!:)


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I loved it hands down!!! I thought he was going to be a complete stranger,but now it sounds like it's Malfoy up to doing something. Update ASAP!

Author's Response: i'm glad you liked it :)
~marlita

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Oh my goodness!
this is is so original!
I'm excited to see where you go with this :)
Update soon!

Author's Response: thanks for reviewing:)
the next chapter is up..!
~marlita

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Interesting. I'm left wondering what happened to Malfoy or "Erric".

Author's Response: you will soon find out who he is and what (or who?) he is seeking *wink*
thanks for reviewing:)
~marlita

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I liked it! The lives you gave the characters were dead on in my mind.

Author's Response: thanks for reviewing:)
~marlita

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Update! I have been waiting! I really want to know what happens next and who that guy is! Is it really lovely Draco?! Update pronto!

Author's Response: i will i will!:)
thanks for reviewing!:)
~marlita

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when are you going to have the next chapter up? im really looking forward to finding put what will happen in your story!!

Author's Response: i'm so sorry for the delay!
next chapter should be up soon!!:)
please keep reading:)
~marlita

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Wow! I'm so intrigued. What happened to him? Is it even Malfoy?Keep writing!!!

Author's Response: you have to wait to read who he is really on the next chapter!:)
~marlita

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this is really good and descriptive so far! keep up the good work :D

Author's Response: thanks for your positive feedback!:)
next chapter is on qeue..!
~marlita

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This story is really good, please put up the next chapter soon!!!:)

Author's Response: thank you so much:)
the next chapter should be up soon!
~marlita

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