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Review #1, by AlwaysSev Chapter Three

13th February 2012:
I really like how you show a lot of Holly's past here. I think that it is really important that the reader knows this about your character as the plot progresses. I really liked her conversation with her brother, and I feel really bad that her Mom didn't tell her about her pregnancy! Wow! But one suggestion is that I would maybe add some more around the whole conversation. I know it is about Holly opening up to her friends, but I think that it would take a little more than her just opening up on the spot. I know this is just for me personally, because I don't think I would be able to open up about those kinds of things so easily! But keep writing, the story is interesting and I can't wait to move on!

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Review #2, by AlwaysSev Chapter One

19th January 2012:
I really liked this chapter! I love Holly! she is such a character! Your writing style is really clear and impressive. I think it is great that they are all close friends, you made their friendship so progressed and clear, and not cheesy at all. I think it is adorable that Holly likes James because I can definitely see them together! I saw one or two small grammatical mistakes, so maybe it would benefit from a read over... But the plot was great!! One more thing is just that I noticed that half way through Ginny's last name changed from Weasely to Potter. But other than that it was great! Can't wait to keep reading! Oh and I love the song that you used as your description! So pretty! I listen to it all the time!

Author's Response: Thank you! That's a really nice review!

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