I really liked the start of your story!
I thought that you did a great job bringing out the characterizations of all the characters that you have. When I see a lot of characters in a story I am always worried about how the Author is going to take the time and explore each and everyone of them...you however did a fantastic job. Just flawless!
I thought you did a great job balancing between the flow, pace and descriptions. The descriptions are really well done and I like the way that you use the smaller details to your advantage. You're a consistant writer and I am highly intrigued as to where this story is going from here.
Keep up the awesome writing! =)
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Very interesting story, I like it a lot so far and I can't wait for the next chapter to come out!Author's Response: Thank you very much ^_^ Report Review
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